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| CHIIJOY 2007-02-27 ch 1,  | abuseI never really see script form writing on this site so already this was a surprise. Umm... I'm not that nitpicky but I can try. Fave Part:/(Speaking slowly, as if speaking to a small child) Yes, it was. Why else would I cast you as Philippa, formerly known as Phillip?/ I think that format wise it would be cooler if you did the person's words right next to their names since writing them like a headline is a little confusing for me. But I loved the story even 'Murmors' within since it dealt with a serious subject and still made it beautifully tragic. "In everyone’s eyes, I’m not a woman. I’m a man pretending to be a woman. Inside, I’m a woman, but all anyone can see is a disfigured man." Great job. |
| Nidhogg 2007-02-24 ch 1, | abusevery nice, liked the character developments all scenes and parts were understood and spoken clearly with parts of mild humor used well written with consideration for the play Mackenzie wrote grammatically correct, no typos |