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elisefey 2008-04-15 ch 23,	abuseSo... When's the next update? Not that I'm interested or anything. Okay, maybe a little. I'm really curious to see more of Guro and Josh, and how Kaskin is going to handle leading the attack.
Espionage In My Shoe 2007-12-18 ch 22,	abuseAw, don't feel retarded! ;) Cuz if /you're/ retarded, then I must go shoot myself to rid the world of my idiocy. xD Anyways: wonderful, wonderful! A masterful story in the making. It is a very original story and I really like Kaskin. She is a good narrator-slash-protagonist. She has her faults, and she's no Mary Sue. It makes me happy inside. x) At first, I was nearly certain that Kaskin and Mikhal were going to later, possibly, in the eventual future get together. However, I was taken quite for surprise with the whole Ping thing. (haha... Ping thing... it rhymes... xD) I feel bad for Guro, but I sort of kind of a little bit sympathize with him a bit. Hm. I'll just have to see, I suppose. =D And I'm down with that. Okay. Umm... I don't think you have anything of dire importance for me to note. Just some typos here and there that don't hinder the reader's comprehension any. ;) Well, then, my work here is done. (Until the next chapter. Bwahaha!) Shoe. P.S. Hi, Chuggur! -pets and gives treat-
Espionage In My Shoe 2007-12-18 ch 1,	abuseInteresting, so far. Just started. (Obviously). ;) But I want to bring attention to one thing: "The sun reached its zenith and began to fall toward the distant horizon to Mikhal’s left. And still, he headed southward, ever south." If he's going south, and the sun sets in the west... wouldn't that be his right? O_o; His left would be east... Unless I've lost my mind. It's been known to happen.
Genato 2007-09-03 ch 19,	abuseit's really good. but i want some more action here. so yeah. there.
Madness Over Reason 2007-08-20 ch 17,	abuseAlright, I first want to tell you that you ought to have many, many more reviews than you do. Honestly, people don't know good fiction anymore. sighs It really ** me off. (not you, but the fact that good fiction is ignored bit) That said, you're a brilliant writer, Kaskin is a very well-rounded, believable character, your dialogue flows extremely well, and I hope you'll quickly indulge me with lots more lovely chapters. Keep up the good work!
Amethyst Asheryn 2007-08-19 ch 17,	abuseHey! I see an Avain quote just dying to be inserted here. :D anyway, I liked this chapter. I liked Mikhal's talk, and the last sentence of the chapter...especially the last sentence. And I'm extremely glad you're back! :D Thanks for the update!
shairimean 2007-07-25 ch 16,	abuseI am SO enjoying this! And truthfully I was slightly skeptical at first, don't ask me why but you can never build your hopes up too high, but right from the summary (which is so strikingly reflective of Kaskin- in a very shortened way, that it can't not make you smile) and the brilliantly crazily funny narrative you introduced to us- I've been captivated and very pleasantly if I may say so myself, entertained. Kaskin is a treasure, indeed she is a very rare character: hard to find, harder to write, and even harder to pull off in a fantasy story. But, hey you managed to do most of it extremely well (I have to credit myself slightly for the finding part) so like really well done you. I love the voice she gives to the story- her way of bringing humor to situations that without her narrative would just be average and well...non humorous. Its interesting to see that kaskin almost uses humor as her defense mechanism- like that is her survival through being a serf and her way of coping with things- in a way. But serioualy I love her and ofcourse she can be quite exasperating about certain matters- ok, only one, but I feel she is entitled to it. Honestly, I actually like the fact that you have made this thing with Guro progress so slowly, because that is way more realsitic and hits character development aswell as relationship development right where they need to be hit. I mean a character like her shouldn't just get over all the things she associates with the symbolic figure of Guro just like that- and it makes for more tension/ drama/ more readers begging for you to write more. So you know what well done on that account too. I like the qualities you have given Kaskin, by no means is she perfect but she is perfectly delightful and entertaining. I like her courage, and her character which propels her to protect those she cares for without thought or question- and ofcourse I love the way she thinks. I would point out all the things I found funny for your benefit but then we;d be here forever. I remeber the comment you made before when you said that her charcetr was immature and only saw things from her perspective- well I think its a good thing too. Every chracter, infact every person has flaws- and anyway don't most people see things only from their own perspective most of the time? It makes her more solid and your story more solid- and not to mention it leaves nice, ample room for character development. and growth. By the way, how old is she? Your story and plot in general is reassuring and I say reassuring because it is good to the point where you have me thorughly convinced that you are absolutely sure of your plot and you know where the story is going because it certainly feels like that- like you are slowly buiding us up to something and I'm not sure whther I should be excited about that something or fear it. We'll just have to wait and see- but also by the pace you have set for the story it seems like its going to be quite lengthy- not that I'm complaining at all. I just hope you don't decide to disappear of the face of the earth anytime soon- you seem to be reliable. ^_^ I do really like your plot and how its slowly progressing. The story itself reads very, very well and it seems to be constructed very well. Like the chapters are well split up so that each section has a diffrent aspect of their journey/ the story. And the writing is really well done. Minus the narrative (which-I hope you fully realise- I have tried to shower with compliments and praise all because it deserves it for the sheer witiiness/ sarcasm- and any other form of humor you throw in along there) the descriptions fit rally well- so that its not dragging but not lacking at all. (Although sometimes quite contemporary for a fanstasy story: something to do with a brick and a wet noodle...yeah, i see where Kaskin gets her characetristics from, I mean when its her narrative you can get away with it but in the prologue...hehe. It was funny.) Thats one thing I really like about the story, it just goes on if you know what I mean. There is no lack of anything in terms of the ageold battle: dialogue vs description. Its nicely balanced out to fit the context and so its very likeable overall. I really like the characters and I admire your ability to handle them all, names plus individual characteristics because it is hard to keep chracters seeming realistic when you have so many. But you do it unfairly well- to the point that each character has their own personality and can be seen as an individual and has infact contributed their part to the story. I also like how you have a balance of characters in terms of their personalities (ie the black, white and the shades of grey) e.g. Ursyl. It gives the story more depth and matter. I hope you have written the first part of the next chapter because I'm really excited about the return of Guro- for one, i knew he was coming back even though you being an evil writer gave no indication of it but instead made us think he had deserted them- and what it means for the developing, growing chracter of Kaskin- nudge, hint. I cannot fault him for his devotion (as you described it) though, not at all. Somehwer along the way, I would like to see a bit more insight on why and since when he loves Kaskin- although I do strongly suspect that it is for reasons that I like her too. And now I'm almost sort of dreading what you have planned because things have been going so well for them and despite what Kaskin says- what goes up must come down. (Which I thought was brilliant and sheer genius by the way, if not too optimistic for her.) Keep writing, keep doing what you've been doing because whatever it is, it works very well. Before I go, I would say how much I really, really like the title of this story. Quiet Chaos- it just seems to fit so well for this story, and the more I think about it, the more I convince myself that its perfect for the story. Which it is you know. So if you where ever in a misguided moment of your life thinking of changing it, don't. For those of us who are worthy enough, we get it, we appreciate it, we love it, for those who don't get it, well they clearly aren't worhty are they? Just wanted to show my appreciation. :D Oh and something which has been puzzling me- why oh why do you have so little reviews!? Any light to shed over the matter? I really hope you get a positive vibe out of this riview because that is what I seriously, genuinely meant- I really like it, everything of it- so I hope my review will kind of you know oh I don't know urge you to update slightly quicker than you wee planning? :D
clavira 2007-04-23 ch 16,	abuseon one hand I can really understand why she is so reluctant and nervous about... accepting him. but on the other hand I feel really bad for Guro - it must be hard for him to love her (if what he feels really is love and not lust) and never know if she can ever stand to look at him without wanting to either beat him to a bloody pulp or running in the other direction as fast as she can. Right, that's all I have to say really. I like your story and I hope you'll update soon!
daedrmr 2007-04-16 ch 16,	abusethis is really good. i like it. the characters are all portrayed realistically and the storylines really good. great work. i cant wait for more so please update soon!
Barraketh 2007-04-09 ch 13,	abuseHey! I'm having a grand ole' time reading, and I blitzed the first dozen chapters before I thought of reviewing. Yeah, right on, and all that. Call me absent minded. But anyway, I'm loving the story so far, and can't wait to read more! Please-Don't-Stop-Writing-Mid-Story! =D
MyNameIsMad 2007-04-05 ch 2,	abuseOuch. That sucks. I wonder how that other guy, the one in the first chapter, fits into all of this. You certainly switched perspective...making me wonder if he was something completely different or your main character saw him before. I dunno. I think too much about tense. :P -Mad
MyNameIsMad 2007-04-05 ch 1,	abuseHaha I like Chuggur. I wondered where your penname had come from. This was a really intense first chapter! Grammar was a-okay and the wording was spiffy. I liked the repetition. Very good! -Mad
Jademerald17 2007-03-16 ch 13,	abuseI love it. So I'm thinking it's Guro...I know I know you can't tell me and I'll have to wait but this is what I'm thinking.
the flaming river 2007-03-15 ch 13,	abuseI am prepared to bet that who was hugging her was not someone she was really...friendly with. Poor baby.
Shiko Hitajiya 2007-03-15 ch 13,	abuseOnly caught one mistake this time. The tears—where they really tears?— Great chapter, though I thought it could've been a bit longer so more stuff could've happened. Well, in my opinion, anyway. Poor Kaskin! Fairly short review this time! ~Shiko

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