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| sk8rgrl 2007-02-24 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis is really very interesting. Different from most of your other stuff, and yet not. It's poignant, and deeply introspective. Very relatable too; I know many people who are like this and I'm sure I'm not the only one. The viewpoint you choose is very interesting, it almost feels like a letter to the person while still managing to sound like a type of journal entry. All over your descriptions are very lush and vivid. All and all nicely protrayed, I feel like a guest in this person's mind being able to participate in how they view this poor girl. The interplay between the two at the end is a nice change from the monologue, and gives a more solid picture of the girl. I love this one. Great job!! ~sk8rgrl |