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| Broken Fairytales 2007-02-24 ch 1,  | abuseI agree. You're using way too many exclamation marks, I feel like I'm yelling at the end of each sentence; it's distracting. Also, there were a few grammar errors, but other then that this poem was great. -Sapphire |
| Lizzy-Lou 2007-02-24 ch 1, | abusehello my pretty, pretty, pretty girl! I was supposed to be first... but I had a lot of review messages to check. Wow... that's a new feeling. Thanks for your review by the way. I've already read this, but I like it big time. I think your writing is definitely improving dearest. |
| Taltush/MeiMei 2007-02-24 ch 1, | abuseI think it's interesting, but I think it would be much better if there were fewer exclaimation points. They take away a lot from the story but distracting me (the reader, I suppose?). It made it feel a bit less silly. I think it's interesting and different, but I just have some issues with too many of these! Other than that very minor point, it's good. |