hehe I've changed my mind, i love this more :P

xx
Ali

I'm glad you added this one shot because when I finished Jennifer's Diary I was extremely confused by the epilogue. Even though I liked her and Devon I wasn't dissapointed by the ending of the story. Both guys are great.

I hardly got halfway through it
You jumped form person to person...confusing
And it was way too chopy, and i really hate when people go '5 months later...' for example, writers are supposed to DECRIBE things not narrate it. The Timmy thing was WAY to cliche, he was baisically perving om Brianna in the first story seriously, do some more reading of other stories, improve on your weaker points becuase thats what this site is all about. Reaalising my mistakes is how I improved, but I still have a long way to go.

well, I seriously understand that high school relationships last during high school strictly, and only the luckiest high school sweethearts last and get married or something, but the thing about fiction is that it's not realistic. and what's the point in writing a 20something chapter story, where the heroes deal with all the s h i t, realize stupid and obvious stuff and at the end they break up cause high school romances are unlikely to last?well, yeah, that is life, but readers like to read something "everlasting" or something along those lines. your story is pretty good,but the ending was unexpected. good luck to you;)

So I just read jennifers diary... then this. I have to say I get mixed feelings. Timmy was the only one who was genuinely nice to her, but I don't think you played them up enough in the first story. Devon and her were sort of pining for eachother for years and for them to just end because her brothers friend, someone she thought of as a friend even if he warmed her up a lil, suddenly kisses her? Now I never ever give bad reviews, If I dont like something I just dont say anything, its just that I loved your story and style of writing. I think it would have been a sweeter ending if you had made it into Devon in the end. Maybe a little scare with the kiss, but to actually have her leave Devon and marry Timmy? I think she went through a lot of angst and depression after everything with Devon to turn around and realize she loved him like a friend? Ignore me, Im sorry this sounds mean I bet and I so didnt mean it to. I just liked your story a lot. I even loved Timmy, I just think maybe a crush from timmy with hime ending up with someone else and realizing it was a crush would have gave the reader a little better of a feeling. Im done IM SORRY!

So was that the second proposal? Coz in the first one you mentioned she said no the firs ttime... UNLESS... she divorces timmy and finds new man! A lot can happen in ten years :D

That was really cute! And it sure made the story a LOT clearer! :)) Hahaha...yea, they ARE a cute couple. Just a suggestion, Maybe you should have just included this in your story? Haha...and in JDKOP, you indicated that Jenny said no at the first proposal...so was this the second proposal? Haha...TC! TC! BB! Tenks. ;)

I'm not ashamed to say i got ridiculously hooked on JDKOP and read this one shot ending all in one go. i have to say the reason was simply it's unique, original and a superb plot and ending! i don't want to sound like i knew this was going to happen but i was rooting for Timmy all the way. in one chapter i think you wrote in the FAQ section , that they had a brotherly and sisterly relationship, that nearly killed me since I'm sure many were interested and loved Devon but i absolutely adored Timmy. He was my favorite no question full stop.
i feel bad that i did not review every chapter but i hope this review makes up for it*smiles innocently*

I fell in luff with this story,
Rachel xoxo

Ps. I'm a sucker for cliches,
i loved this one-shot, it Rocked!

Aw!! Nice way to sum it up, goodjob! :) (I didn't think your other one was crappy, btw. :$ lol)

aw so0o0o0 cute

That was a lovely follow up to the story - very romantic! I really enjoyed it.