I love this. Breaking the rules. Living outside the box. Being free. You incorporate these concepts so well without it seeming forced. Great.

there is something in this that is inherently feminist. it makes me ache with its beauty, and for my own nostalgia, and for my wish that i'd realized the truth in this poem a long time ago.

This truly captures a great deal of the divide between innocence and the "real" world. The way that the character is described and portrayed really paints a vivid relatable picture. I like how you've brought in the specifics of a tomboy unknown. Especially the mothers response to what might happen in the future if she remains that carefree way. Very slice of life. Excellent visual scene. Great write.

Pretty pretty pretty.

Oh, yes. This is so pretty.

- Noelle

I know how great it feels to break a few rules sometimes and just enjoy being your own person. The title of this is also so true since I think of my summers in the same away and the line breaks are very effective.

i cannot help but fall in love with the girl in your poem although i must have seen her before someowhere else- she is almost the typical spunky heroine, very contemporary, very likeable. interesting syntax in lines like "no place for unripped/dresses" and "misplaced displeasure". Your line breaks give me a sense of meaning despite the apparent chaos. do keep writing! :)

This was really good. The flow of it was smooth and I just really liked it!