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Reviews For: Sonnets

The Ryter 2008-05-15 ch 1,	abuseA very good story that makes you think after it is done. I truly enjoyed this sonnet.
R. E. Ellison 2008-04-24 ch 1,	abuseI am absolutely thrilled that there is SOMEONE who also writes sonnets for this site! Since there isn't a separate section for them, I guess "general" is going to have to do. Try variations on rhyme schemes - Petrarchan, Italian and the Wyatt variants - to jumpstart your creativity. It's already difficult to write a sonnet, so the fact that you have (and a pretty decent one at that) is already a battle half-won. The rhyme schemes, unfortunately, often twist the wording to sound artificial (but hey, it's POETRY, and IAMBIC PENTAMETER - it's ALREADY artificial!) (and I also take out the middle syllable of 'every'.)
123454321 2008-02-29 ch 1,	abuseBut for the stretched rhyme of 'shortened' and 'portend' (nice word by the way), I can say your rhyming never faulters. The subject matter, while as old as the time you so effortlessly described, has been successfully brought to life. However, it seems a matte life; void of emotion. It conveys feelings felt by all eventually, but not in a new fashion. By the words and wording, I believe you can do better. -J.A.
Lurid Black 2008-01-11 ch 1,	abuseSweet, gives the reader a true feel of a Shakesperian poem. Really well done, needs no improvement. Keep writing! ~Lurid~
With Rhyme and Reason 2007-03-08 ch 1,	abuseVery good. I like it a lot. How Shakesperian of you! Great form, good handle on meter. I really like the theme, about fleeting existence. It's very powerful. JE
Foxyone56 2007-03-08 ch 1,	abuseHow very, very true. I almost did not make it last year. I now cherish everyday that I have left. Well Done! Do you have any other poetry elsewhere? I found this site for the first time today. Most of my poems are on My name is Lucille and Surname Zunckel if you would like to read some of my writings.

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