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| lomz 2008-02-23 ch 1,  | abusehahaha i like it |
| Erin Lynn 2007-05-27 ch 1, | abuseThe image of the coffehouse and the red tea is very warming. Great job! |
| in theory 2007-03-27 ch 1, | abuseI likey, and feel weirdly able to relate to the title (hate coffee, etc..) |
| aprettywar 2007-03-22 ch 1, | abusethanks for the input :) i really like the imagery in this...it's very warm-feeling. nice work. |
| Ashelin 2007-03-22 ch 1, | abuseYes, I adore this. I don't even like haiku. The title was brilliant, and the first line of the poem completely drew me in. I loved it, wonderful job. |
| nine iron 2007-03-04 ch 1, | abuseHey, thanks for the review. I have had a total blind spot for that this weekend! I have done it about 3 times!! Im a real stickler for getting it right but even myself and my two beta readers miss a few things. Love this, it has a chatty background sound as you read it, as if you were really in a coffehouse! |
| Miriam Doyle 2007-03-01 ch 1, | abuseI've finally got time to read your stuff, at last. I loved the whispers of red tea bit. Not only did it show how the people talked it also referred to the steam rising from the cups. |
| sleeping Pisces 2007-02-28 ch 1, | abuseImpressive title. Amazing visual, and the word use was fantastic. I could almost smell the caffeine. Daze |
| Basara 2007-02-27 ch 1, | abusewow... this made me wonder... nice... |
| she smolders 2007-02-26 ch 1, | abuseThere's something ironic in between the lines of this piece. The title made me smile. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-02-26 ch 1, | abuseOoh, I like this. The use of the color red, even though it's simply done, adds this entirely new depth to this piece. And the phrase "caffeine collusion" is simply fantastic. Even though I don't care for coffee that much, I must favorite this. Fabulously done. Keep writing! :) |
| greenGalilee 2007-02-25 ch 1, | abuse"Caffeine collusion" is wonderfully chosen. I really love all of your poetry. It has a strange uniqueness that most authors are never able to find. |
| burning in effigy 2007-02-25 ch 1, | abusethe title drew me in and i was surprised at what i found; not expecting what you wrote :) i adore the last line; only two words but they fit so perfectly with each other and the rest of the haiku |
| The Un-great-ful 2007-02-25 ch 1, | abuseHa! Almost as many syllables in your title. lol I like the obscurity of your work, it is akin to trying to unpick a tricky knot. Alan. |