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| Aomera 2007-03-20 ch 1, | abuseit's really lovely lozzy. sad but good. not sure about the last three line ' He fought for England...He fought for you' you could just end it on 'My Daddy did just that.' I think it would be more powerful, but up to you! Really well written lovely Lozzy :) |
| ADSpencer 2007-02-28 ch 1, | abuseNicely done. It tells a very interesting story. |