good work. keep writing

I like this a lot. A lot, a lot :) The poem was a nice touch. I also enjoy the way you narrate. It's in third person, but yet still...personal, I guess. I'm not sure I'm making any sense ;) What I'm trying to say is...I love it, and hope to see more from you.

~carm~

i like it. though the poem between the story part gets kinda confusing. you might also want to use more detail.

AHA! I was just thinking that someone needed to make a good story about Lilith (assuming that's who the woman was.) I'd like to read more.