Nice essay. It sounds a bit like a rant. Good job expressing yourself.

~Twilight Starr~

A good essay. Some of the opinions concede with mine. I'm sure the private school/public school thing differs from country to country (and time). I went to a private girls school some years ago and it was good. Of course, the cliques you've mention existed then and will continue to be a part of school life. I guess I'm lucky because people weren't judged stupidly when I was at schol! Enjoyed reading this- thought-provoking and well-written.

Ugh - too true!

Another definition for 'chav' if you want to explain it to American readers (I figure it out relatively quickly): An English person who tried to dress/look/act like extreme American Hip Hop fans and rappers. i.e. Dudley Dursly in the movie "Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix".

Aw, crap, getting off topic again like my other reviews. Anyway, just saying, I love your essays.

This is like...a 100% matching describtion of what I think XD

Hahah!

ROCK ON!

Hahaha! Not only was this amusing, I get what you mean. And all chavs need to be sterilised and sent off to a remote corner of Siberia.

Wow...I so feel like that...I am not obsessed with the latest fashions and try to be as individual as I can possibly be. I only have around three actual friends who even then deem ME as PERFECT just because I get good grades and like for things I do to look well. People think I am unsocial and that I never talk, which it is better that way because I would probably end up offending someone.I like you have not even gone on a date, held a boy's hand, etc. Okay since I am now off of my soapbox, I seriously think that you have a lot of potential, unlike me.

P.S I can not speak computer lingo, I do some simple stuff but not alot...ha.

I enjoyed this little essay very much. *Evil laugh*
The behaviors sound very middle-school to me. Nonetheless, I go to a public high school, and the girls you described are actually described fairly accurately. I don't know why they go to brand name stores to get gym clothes.
I eventually gave up as well. Heck, I'm superbly weird, and when others say, "Ew, you're weird", I say, "Why, thank you for the compliment!" I've done that numerous amounts of times, especially when I put books on my head. I've found something, though--some of the decent half of the general population will like you if you're not being fake. Not that that is my goal, mind you, but still, I suppose it's menially encouraging.
IM speak. Atrocious. I hate it. It is very addictive, and completely horrible to read. I hate it, hate it, hate it. I'm so formal when I text message and such... ugh...
I believe you've accurately addressed a worldwide pandemic...epidemic? Both? Whichever, it is a social disease and ought to be eliminated.
Thank you for the review! I do have to edit it... the first person issue... I hate writing so formally, though! Ah, well. I'm glad you appreciated it. I suppose I have a quirky definition of beauty, quirky meaning it's not what most people think. They think, "Some gurl whoz hott and sexy" or something bizarre, I suppose.

Farewell for now. I've babbled on long enough.

Sarcastic Presence

This is an excellent essay, though I do suggest that you try to make somewhat more obvious of a statement. And yes, I agree with certain reviewers that you should so something about it. Hate isn't healthy.

I would recommend you switch schools. Your intense hatred and contempt for the girls you describe can't be healthy. Besides, it tends to cloud your judgement, and hinders your ability to write a well-organized paper. Your experiences are definitely worth sharing, but perhaps some more structure would make it easier for others to understand your plight. Anyway, best of luck with your writing competition; I'm sure your essay will make an impression!

I thought it was quite good, however... it could always be better. You know me. I thought that instead of the blatant mockery of 'school life' here, you could do better with something more subtle - more along the lines of my little apology letter. ;-P

Cheers,
~TheUnknownMarauder~

Hm...See, you *say* you don't care, but this entire essay is focused, obsessed with what these girls are doing to you.

I'm sure you'll get a good mark; this is quite well-written.

This isn't anything like my school experience; must be because it's a private school.

I thought this essay was going to be a bit more general, or offer solutions, but it turned out to be a memoir. Nothing wrong with that, of course, but maybe you should edit your summary/author notes.

Great essay!
I personally don't have to wear a uniform, but there was thought of it. And I go to a public school.

Thanks for reviewing my essay.

Your paper is a start, but since this is for a grade you should avoid the use of colloquialisms (it's like slang if you don't know), contractions, informal expressions ect. It is like a laundery list,no offence. Don't worry about making it sequentail/ chronological; that is immature writing. Make it more interesing. Focus on diction (word choice) and syntax (sentence structure). Consider using sentence variation. Perhaps make it more like a narrative while incorporating the theme of individuality. Example: "...Their (the popular girls')faces were saturated with make up, ready to lose their freedoms and their morals in order to conform to society. .." something along those lines. Good luck. I hope you get that A for a grade you are looking for, and you seem like a nice person. Although I'm not offended, you have to becarful with the teacher. If I were grading this I would give it an B, at most a 90 depending on the rubric (unfortunalty I don't know the criteria). By my standards, you really need to work hard for an A. Write more. Take risks. Don't be middle school in your paper. Yes, I am a great writer that always makes 100s, so I reccommend for you to take my advice.

Don't worry! I've been through worse. I mean c'mon! It doesn't matter wheather your long socks are 6 feet long. The **, and yes, I'm calling them **, would have to wear tight too don't they? Let them be see-through. Let the embarressment take over them. No deed goes unpunished. ;)

Wow another private girls school student- thank-you for your tips they were so useful but I'm afraid that you can now call members of the 'cool' group **- as long as they haven't slept with your boyfriend now -because calling your friends a ** is 'cool' now and so is saying 'hey **' *air kiss* *air kiss*- this is so amazingly cool at my school but I'm afraid emo is in this season- we seem to be behind you over here in Australia. I. will. never. understand. them. oh well- as anyone who has been outcasted for a long period of time knows- I don't need them anyway.

I still don't understand why my parents don't see, a private all girls school can be just as horrible as any other school. Although I've never really tried to fit in- nor can I fit in with the other 'geek' becasue unlike her I'm not a 'true geek' becasue I'm too busy reading to give a stuff about doing my homework and she has the intellectual capability of a robot.Yet somehow everyone takes her word as the written law. The ana/obesity thing is also correct yet all the girls at my school are still thin even though they eat 'obesely', it is really quite sad.

Thank-you for the wonderful story I enjoyed it and to some point I can (kind of) relate.