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Alcaeus of Cronus 2008-10-11 ch 24,	abuseThoughts Forgotten: Hell's Circus. Nice. lol. Though, but the sound of it, it sounds like a cross between a circus and a carnival. Which just makes it all the creepier. lol OF COURSE I will still read the next chapter. Anyone who was reading a story involving a battle between the supernatural forces of light and darkness and wasn't expecting death and tragedy is really far too naive, and have no right to blame the story for their disappointment. Alecia was right to think about it logically, but at the same time, she should realize that there is more to the human mind than she realizes if it can be interfered with and entered in such a way. The only way we can really hope to interface with the realm of the psyche is with physical allegories for mental processes: illusions. It's the only way we are mentally prepared to see it, and as it is in our minds, it will shape itself to our understanding. And then there is the matter of the realm of the soul, which is even more elusive and confusing. So, if she really hopes to be enlightened, then she should be willing to embrace whatever forbidden truth she comes across. I think your introduction of the mind realm is very interesting, and it adds an interesting and malleable playing field for the events to come. I think it will provide some interesting twists and turns. Doceon is far too powerful of a being to be killed simply by fire. I would reckon that he is above the causes of mortal death. And besides, he had already said that it was possible that death would not happen in the realm of the mind. I think he'll be hurting for the experience, but personally, I think it's something that he could easily survive. I'll be waiting anxiously for the next chapter. :)
Freddy Teddy 2008-10-11 ch 24,	abuseHe can't die! He can't die! He can't die! He can't die! No No No! He can't DIE!
Fantasy Real 2008-10-11 ch 24,	abuseIf Doceon really died I'll kill you. Maybe that is a bit extreme... or maybe it isn't. Why did you make me fall in love with Doceon then kill him off? Why? And BTW, where did Levi and his brother go? Are they coming back?
McRmoonvamp 2008-10-03 ch 23,	abuseupdate was cool. The ending wasnt sappy lol but it was really good :)
kittymobile 2008-10-03 ch 23,	abusewow, love this chapter. no =] not at all doceon...hmm. its sad and it makes me look on him like a wounded kitten. hes lovely. told you i liked him ^^ EVIL! yes, sure! :) hmm...not surprised. isaiah is a mysterious dude. he keeps his secrets close. now, get writing!!:D
kittymobile 2008-10-03 ch 22,	abuseawesome chapter. i missed the alert for this one xD. sorry. im on 40,0 words now. YAY! lol. hope the young adult thing goes well and youd so better not abandon this. now, onto the questions: still dont trust her, yet. no. xD. tense and complicated. yes, i like it. sorta like that old myth of capturing souls in a photograph. a little, yeah. xD. hmm...ima look up lots of supernatural creatures. need it for my current story xD. Chow :)
Carmel March 2008-10-02 ch 23,	abuseJeez, girly, you've got some amazing skill with words. I love this. This is quite an addicting story :) Can't wait for more. ~Carm~ PS Oh boy, it's not that big of an honour :) And no, no plans to publish. Do you?
Freddy Teddy 2008-10-01 ch 23,	abuseThey're so good yet too short!
Alcaeus of Cronus 2008-10-01 ch 23,	abuseAutir Seras: Wow, you're really cranking out the chapters. Way to go, girl. First of all, I have to say, I love the angels' names. They have a very heavenly, regal sort of ring to them. Awesome. No, I don't think your ending was obnoxiously sappy, nor do I believe sappy is the right word to use here. You've established that your creatures of the night are to be thought of as people, but not as humans. Doceon is not a human. He is an angel. A creation of inhuman perfection, righteousness and mercy. Not only that, but he is a RECENT creation of those virtues, by what you've told me. His youth and his nature as an angel combine to make him what he is, and as a being of heavenly light, he seeks love and compassion, and is resonant with them. You were true to what he is, and true to the nature of his power as such. Your ending was what it should be. It seems that you are, indeed, taking a very different take on heaven and its denizens. Traditionally, angels are not humans and humans are not angels. Angels were created first, without free will as sentinels to do the bidding of God. Humans were made last, with the ability to choose whether to accept or deny God. Angels are, by their very nature, without sin and without tainted spirit. They are not subject to the trials that we are. However, I don't view this difference in your characters as a misunderstanding so much as I see it as an opportunity to put a new spin on what an angel is. I'm curious to see where this goes. I feel that Doceon, out of everyone, is to be trusted the most. His young naivety and altruistic, caring nature make him an invaluable guide. For what he is, I have to say, I feel bad for him, having to see his master slain and denied his wings and passage back to Heaven. But, created for battle, I imagine he must have pondered this outcome at some point. So, The Silencer is both a demon and a dark angel? Or am I mistaken? It seems that his existence is a much bigger threat than I thought. I sort of wonder what his agenda is at this point, if he slays the creatures of darkness AND those of heavenly light. I come to wonder if his agenda is dominion over all, or if he is just a creature of unfettered wrath that seeks to destroy whatever it cannot control? Yes, I think it was absolutely right for you to put an angel into the story. In a world, your world, that affirms the existence of hell, it is only logical that it affirms the existence of Heaven, as well. As such, I would think that the armies of Heaven would not stay their hand at such a threat on the mortal world. An angel's presence is logical here, and it creates a great balance. I think the friendship between Aezra and Isaiah makes sense. It seems to me that they are both oddities of their respective kinds, and by my experience, oddities tend to find a common ground. Aezra, a powerful, soul-eating creature, tens of thousands of years old, yet unexpectedly chipper and feminine, bereft of royal dignities. And Isaiah, a man of a mind that often cherishes the more lavish and decadent "finer" things in life who has forsaken such a lifestyle for one of humble simplicity, and seems to take greater pleasure in the growth of his students than in the power it affords him. They both seem to deviate from what is expected of their kind, and I expect that common ground helped to forge their friendship. What I'm curious about is what their history together entails, and what its significance is to the events at hand.
Fantasy Real 2008-09-30 ch 23,	abuseDoceon is one of my favorite characters starting this chapter. Hey, I had to find a replacement Levi for a while. The ending? I loved it. It may be sappy but it was just so... aw. The only part I didn't like was the glow and two lives deal. Um... that was weird and sappy. Oh well. Doceon. I love him to pieces. I mean, how do you not? His story was sad, but I liked it. Autir Seras? My thoughts on him. Confused, but I'm guessing how Alecia is the Golden Belle, Samuel is the Autir Seras. I don't know... Yes. Angels are the second best mythological creature, next to vampires in my opinion. So angel in the story for me gets a A+. I just want to say I'm hoping that the jealousy Alecia had was not romantic at all. I just picture Isaiah around fifty so that would just be weird.
urbanfictionalist 2008-09-30 ch 23,	abusei liked the chapter i can't wait until you update again
Its.Not.Me.Its.You. 2008-09-27 ch 22,	abusei love the story! cant wait for more! hope you update soon! --iflyhugs
Carmel March 2008-09-27 ch 22,	abuseGreat chapter. This story never ceases to amaze me :) Please, please update soon! ~Carm~
Freddy Teddy 2008-09-27 ch 22,	abuseI have a very bad feeling about her taking Aezra into the real world...
Master Soleil 2008-09-27 ch 22,	abuseQuite interesting, though i still do not like Aezra. Evil people just get on my nerves, naturally. Um...may I venture to say that she tricked Alecia into letting her out and that she will somehow go on a rampage? Also, nice french usage. -salut

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