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grayviper 2008-05-02 ch 31,	abuseI loved this story from begining to end, the vivid details and the twist that im pretty sure no one expected.I look forward to reading anything you write in the future. May God continue to bless you XOXOXO Grayviper
grayviper 2008-05-02 ch 29,	abuse0.o i wonder which one did it, this chapter is a real nail bitter sweet and again i love the use of bible verses to help the characters out in situation they have no control over
Quixotically Tai 2008-01-22 ch 31,	abuseAh, oh my gosh, I loved the ending! I didn't see the Pastor coming! Oh God, I thought it was Joseph. XD You should have seen me, over here cursing at him like "You son of a...! How dare you touch Aurora!" XD Lol. Anyways... chokes back a laugh I guess Joseph is a nice guy after all. ^_^ And I love Aurora. Watch when she grows up, she dyes her hair black, wears black plastic bracelets and listens to hard Christian rock. XD Lol. She's so hardcore. laughs I'm kinda sad this story's over now... I wanted Garrett to bust the rapist in the act or something, and then horizontally tackle him or something. And then shoot him in the leg. Twice. XD Lol. Ciao! ^.~ - Quixotically Tai
Quixotically Tai 2008-01-22 ch 27,	abuseKlyne, I just want you to know that this story has really touched me. I'm going through a bit of a hard time (well, the transition from child to adult... being 18 is hard, hehe), and this story really gave me strength and helped me. Even though it's just a story, I feel like all your characters are so real, and I can see and feel everything they do in my head. You are really a great writer! You've probably gotten this before (but even if you haven't), but you should really consider publishing this as a book. I can assure you that I'd so jump on that book soon as it showed up in stores! You've been a real inspiration on my part; thanks to you and this story, I've successfully started reading my bible more, and things have become a lot clearer. I know it was probably God who drew me to this story to help me out, so thanks to God also. Just wanted to let you know how much you've done, besides just post a story on Fiction Press! Thanks! ^_^ - Quixotically Tai
emumonster 2008-01-08 ch 31,	abuseYay, all done. I like how everything turned out in the end. A little sap never hurt anyone. In fact, considering the tragedy involved throughout the story, it was a breath of fresh air. I noticed how early on, there was very little religious influence, and later on it becoming much more prominent. I suppose that kind of reflects Garrett's own spiritual growth throughout the novel. I'm sure that was intended, so nice job with that. God. Even at the end, I still feel bad for what Ariella has to live with the rest of her life, but at least everything is perfect in the end and perhaps thats comforting. If anything else, I'd say your story gave me pause to consider my own spiritual assumptions. I'm an atheist, and I'd be lying if I said I had a spiritual epiphany. That would be dishonest. However, I can't help but marvel at how positive of a force it was in Garret's and Ariella's life to have their faith. Without it, I'm sure things wouldn't have turned out for the better. Then again, I personally would have never abandoned her in the first place. Though I'm not religious I do have a fairly strong personal ethic that guides me and I've never felt I need outside support. shrug Anyway, for what its worth, you got me thinking about spirituality again, so maybe that'll bring a smile to your face. :)
emumonster 2008-01-07 ch 22,	abuseOh thank god! I have a little bubble of happiness inside of me now. I wasn't sure if I could stand to see their lives spiral down any further. I know its not over yet, but I'm happy they're back together. :)
emumonster 2008-01-07 ch 20,	abuseGarrett is really annoying me, especially with how the previous chapter wrapped up with him "fleeing" like a wimp. God. I almost can't imagine Ariella taking him back after what he's put her through. I mean, she was raped, impregnated, and her life is crumbling down around her. Its probably the time in her life when she is the most vulnerable and needs someone there for her more than anything, and he's abandoned her. I really don't care about his reasonings, he is a horrible person right now and I almost don't think he deserves to live happily ever after. I almost empathize with her "stabbing his eyes out with a screwdriver" memory. I mean... okay, the rational for his reason is there in a twisted way, and I am not saying he's got it easy, But dang! You don't turn your back on your wife like that. The only thing I can imagine is that he's got some major whacko mental hangups from childhood and other past traumas. breaths deeply Ok I know its just fiction, but he's really ** me off. I want to strangle him (lol). So, Joseph... he's been acting creeping for a few chapters now, and the creep-factor just shot up to "ludicrous speed" in this chapter. If he were revealed as the rapist I'd barely register shock at all, its been laid on pretty thick. He's known them their entire relationship, so he's familiar with both of them. Enticing Garrett to relocate, the fact that he's in a failing marriage, the POV of the rapist in chapter 15 implies he's probably FBI, he knows both characters quite personally and they're comfortable with him, his lascivious intent towards her. That said, fingering him as the suspect probably wasn't your intent, so its probably just an elaborate red herring. Maybe its something to do with the conspiracies surrounding the murder cases somehow. Maybe you'll just have the rapist being a no-name FBI team member. Nah, that'd be weak, you got something sinister brewing. Anyway, I think I'm going to pass out on this reading marathon, but I must finish! I hope somehow you settle things so I stop hating Garrett so much. I know she wants him back, but if he just returns and comes clean and she melts in his arms at one kiss, I'm going to be disappointed. She has a right to be pretty unforgiving imo, as much as her religious believes dictate otherwise. He really needs to crawl across a floor of broken glass while pleading her name, or something equivalent. Making the baby Garret's would be a sugar sweet ending, but maybe too much so. I'd guess that sort of defeats the entire theme you've been sprinkling throughout your novel about unconditional love. Ok, I'm done.
emumonster 2008-01-07 ch 11,	abuseI'm torn between wishing Garret a solid ** whooping and feeling sorry for him. I mean, if he can't bring himself to accept the baby, than it truly is wrong for him to be a "pretend" dad. I know how hard it is to want to make yourself believe in something, because it would make everything in your life better, but as hard as you try, you can't lie to yourself. I just wish he could overcome it, he's very weak right now. She's facing the same demons as him, but she's not running (she could, she could get an abortion or go adoption, but she's sticking to her guns). She definitely comes across as the stronger of the two at the moment. At least in my eyes.
emumonster 2008-01-07 ch 2,	abuseDamn... that's a real mind *. I'm speechless and you didn't even go into details. Maybe thats what made it all the more dreadful. I knew it was coming, the dread slowly building as Garret felt time slip away, but it didn't soften the blow. I really hope she recovers, its painful to see her shy away from contact. From reading the synopsis though, it doesn't seem you're going to let up on the emotional roller coaster. Damn... here's hoping for a happy ending. I'm going to have to read until I reach it or I won't be able to sleep. Good writing by the way... but man... They were so happy. single tear*
xhianglian 2007-12-25 ch 1,	abusenice!
lisagal 2007-12-20 ch 31,	abuseIts a wonderful story and one of the ones on fictionpress that i consider are more advanced then others (in a good way! ^^) and your a great writter. keep up the great work.
Nefertiry 2007-11-04 ch 31,	abuseWonderful epilogue. Not at all too sappy-- though being a sap lover too, maybe I am not such a good judge. I would like to say that if you ever decided on a sequel- whether relevant to this version or your original thought (of not revealing the rapist because it "wasn't about that)- I would be more than happy to read it. I wish you the best in your future endeavors and hope to see more work from you in the future. God bless you. And again-- thank you.
JennieMR 2007-11-04 ch 31,	abuseaww, it brought tears to my eyes seeing Garrett with Aurora, and seeing how happy they are now. So it was the pastor. How sad. :( He's wrecked his home, but he should have been prosecuted for past rapes either way. It's awful... just plain awful. :( Again, thanks for the tear-jerking, instense, great read!
Quixotically Tai 2007-11-04 ch 1,	abusepause ...well, I had been thinking about how to review this wonderful work of fiction since halfway throug hthis first chapter, and all I got were happy faces in my head instead of words. XD So I will now attempt to translate my thoughts: 1) My brain hasn't been stimulated to think this clearly in a LONG time. It was like one of those best-selling books you'd find in the book store by that one super-smart auther person! I'm extremely happy about that. ^-^ 2) The characters made me so very happy... I love it when the characters in a story are as if they're real, and these guys were definitely real... I liked Garrett the most, since he is literally just like me... I was like "Woah! How'd you know so much about me! XD" (save for the fact that I'm 18, not 25). So that connection was really a happy moment. 3) The last thing that made my day was how excellent your grammar and everything was! It all flowed so smoothly and such... I don't know how you read, but as I read it's as if the dialogue is going on in my head, and as my inner-dialogue voice spoke, it was oh-so-smooth... no pauses at all! I love how you write... ^-^ Those were the thoughts I felt I should share with you... great job with all your writing! I shall read on later, but just know that you really are an excellent writing... you definitely should publish a book or something. That would be nice (and I'd definitely buy all your stuff! XD)
not-what-you-think 2007-11-03 ch 29,	abuseOh, okay. I just can't believe this story is already over... Hm, well, wow. A new one is good also. I spent two months without writing and I was on the edge of losing it. I've started a new story and I'm not sure about putting it up here. But I bet that your new story is going to be as great or even greater than Maelstrom. As more stories we write, the more we become better at it. Books have a life of their own, you know? You're welcome. Thanks for letting us read your story.

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