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| Leaves of Labefaction 2008-05-17 ch 1,  | abuseSo beautiful! And very hopeful, too. I like it a lot. -LoL |
| Ajna 2007-05-07 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful and inspiring! I loved every word of this; you're a great writer! |
| Temeraire 2007-04-18 ch 1, | abuseBeautifully written. The words flow through you like a river. It's very melodic in a sense... I am wondering why you emphasized the color 'blue' near the end of the poem, with 'azure sky', 'brilliant blue', and 'powerful skies'. Hm. It does give the poem a...sense of freedom and spirit. And it reminds me of a stream. I'm babbling too much now. XD Great job. ;) --Kazilik |
| little smiles 2007-03-30 ch 1, | abuseI love the serenity in this poem, it's very beautiful. The third stanza was my favourite, the image I get from it is very calming and "natural". You have such a lovely style :) |
| Holly Rose E 2007-03-30 ch 1, | abuseits got a nice lazy feel to it, which i enjoyed. reflective, mature. good job. |
| Jay-Ling 2007-03-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseBrilliant. |
| simpleplan13 2007-03-25 ch 1, | abuseI like the uplifting tone.. those first two lines were awesome... great piece |
| PM20 2007-03-08 ch 1, | abuseThis poem has a nice flow, but it didn't really evoke any strong emotion in me. There was some nice imagery in parts throughout the poem, but I guess I found it hard to get a vivid image in my head as I read. I did enjoy the poem, and you probably had reasons for making the stanzas short and sweet, but perhaps you could consider adding some more imagery. |
| Aquafied 2007-03-04 ch 1, | abuseit is a blessing to be so beautiful |
| breezy nostrils 2007-02-27 ch 1, | abusesomething very peaceful about this poem. i like the way you used nature...very wordsworth :) nice work. |
| The Postscript 2007-02-27 ch 1, | abuseWonderful ... simple and calming. I really love the line "write our continuation." as if we could write our own lives the way we wanted to - without disruption or other problems. Keep writing, k. |
| je suis une pomme du terre. 2007-02-26 ch 1, | abuseUwahh! Beautiful!! Sugoi! @.@ Your poetry is so beautiful... I especially love the line "pieces of my heart/lost in the dark" It's such a strong image X.X Ahh!! I love it so much!! Keep writing and never never stop!! |