Hey, it's Bo! ^^ Um...just a few things: most of it is a little bland and lacking in detail. There are a few typos and a couple of things I would change to make it flow better. If you'd like some details, just email me or whatev. Luvs! Bye. ^^

This is a great start to a story. Message me when you update it pleez. P.S. How do you upload stories to a dcument manager?? I'm reely cnfused on that. anyway I give your story 4 stars out of 5. Keep the good work up!