OMG, haha cutest story EVER

i feel like such a girl but all i want to say is aw

good job!

This was a nice refreshing story. I thought it was original and different because it's from a whole different point of view. It's also sweet and well, as before, pleasantly unexpected. :)

Oh my God, that was simply... beautiful? Mind-blowing? I love the way you tell the story through a third person who doesn't have anything to do with the main plot. And of course, the entire phrasing and wording of the story brings whatever you want to portray across just right. The girl's character is developed enough for a one-shot while the whole gist of the story, while cliched, is perfect in its own way. Great one-shot here, girl, it's totally going on my favourite stories :)

adorable...seriously adorable... the narration seems very realistic... the dialogue was as it would have been... meh i wish it was real...

brilliant writing but expected from you...

oh wow.

That is so unbelievably sweet!

absolutly beautiful

very well written

Aww! That was such adorable fluff :D

Oh this is so cute. :) Another awesome one-shot! Yay! :D

Lovely. Like all your other pieces. I wish I could be witness to something like this, athough it can be a little creepy watching people like that. Or being watched like that. Meh. Lovely all the same.

Aww. It was so cute my eyes teared up! I love your work! it's amazing. keep it up!

Shay

That was really nice! I liked how it was from an unusual third person perspective. It was a nice change. Please keep writing!

I love this story. It's beautifully written, and I'm sure that I will read it again later.