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| Aerosquid 2007-02-27 ch 1,  | abuseI always enjoy any story about our relationship with technology and how it has shaped our lives and attitudes. I have two suggestions for you. Extend this story out a few chapters. You have a great premise. Also: Bring the time line closer to ours. Maybe 30 to 50 years in the future. Just a thought. Keep up the good work ! |