I liked it. I haven't been writing lately either =[ I think I pretty much suck at it now, lol. Oh well, you still kick **.

Okay, not a big fan of the "and" on the first line. The simplistic repetition is a little offputting for an intro too. More vivid verbs might work better to contrast the next line of you being still.

Maybe "Perhaps" instead of "Or" on the fourth line as well, expand that idea out a little more. The "and" on the sixth line could easily be a comma (less jarring). Commas after seven and eight would work well too. Another period after line eleven would work well too. More periods basically.

Otherwise I quite like the content.

.:midnight:.