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Midnight In Eden 3/26/07 . chapter 1Okay, technical things first. If the first line is your title and not part of the poem, at least bold it otherwise it gets a little confusing. Also, don't start line three with an "and", starting sentences with them always feels a little wrong. It's a little repetitious but I think if you fleshed it out a little more it wouldn't matter as much. I think though you could kill the "addiction" on the third to last line though easily. .:midnight:. |