|Reviews for The Deadly Flower|
| KrazyFrog100 11/24/12 . chapter 27
Incredible job! I can't even tell you how much I love to read your writing. It's perfect. The Dahlia/Callum moments were so great - understated but really meaningful and sweet. The Dahlia/Liam moments were great too. He bought her tea! Yay!
| Guest 11/24/12 . chapter 27
Love your story...that is all :)
| Guest 11/24/12 . chapter 27
so much action! i absolutely loved this chapter. wow!
| junebird28 11/24/12 . chapter 27
Great chapter! I absolutely love the relationship between dahlia and liam, it's just so funny and sweet. He's just a really loveable callum... There aren't even words to describe him, especially the way you do :). Keep up the amazing work! Update soon
| stuck in bed 11/24/12 . chapter 27
A new chapter!
Okay, so down to work. I really liked the beginning of the chapter. I don't know why, but it really established Dahlia as a strong character for me. And I know what you're thinking: "26 chapters now and she hasn't realized this yet?" But bear with me - I think it's just the way she handled the situation. There was a man there with her. She didn't run helplessly after him; he didn't guide her. Nor did Dahlia seem like a superhero compared to him. They were on equal levels, equal terms, and I really liked it. And seriously, how brave is Dahlia? I think I'd just start hyperventilating. Which is probably not a good idea. But anyway.
"The car, a black sedan with tinted windows, was stopped in the middle of the road, its four doors spread open. The faint ding ding ding of the car's security system was the only sound I could hear...There was no one." - that is so incredibly creepy. I could practically imagine that in front of my eyes and the suspense lasted for a bit. I love how after they told Dahlia that the car was going to blow up, she went closer for an inspection. Totally something she would do.
I liked how Liam was upset that his car exploded. It definitely added some humor to the situation. I think the part where they discuss what Lilynn could be up to was actually pretty useful. You sort of cleared up the situation without actually retelling the story as well as making me wonder what Lilynn's plan is. I can't wait to find out!
Although the Dahlia and Callum scene wasn't much, I think I preferred it that way. Their relationship shouldn't be the main focus of the story. There's already many things going on, and them liking each other isn't their only priority. That being said, I do love me some Dahlia and Callum moments.
And Liam getting Dahlia the Earl Grey was sweet (even I don't really like Earl Grey, but that's irrevelant, really) and that line at the ending was a good way to close up the chapter. No cliff hanger, fortunately. No offense, I love cliff hangers, but after Ch.25's cliff hanger, it was nice to not get one. If that makes any sense.
Anyway, I'll definitely be checking out your formspring. Would you actually believe that I was thinking about that a few days ago? I was looking through formspring and I was like, "But Carmel March doesn't have one. Snap." I digress.
Can't wait for the next chapter! :)
(On a side note: "Where does this bitch live?" . .chapter.)
| Writing In Ink Forever 11/23/12 . chapter 27
Wow. Lovely Chapter.
Lilynn is a beyoch! Jealousy will get you no where in life hon. Lol.
I loved this chapter though. It showed how Dahlia can be, and showed a soft spot in Liam. :)
| Guest 11/23/12 . chapter 27
thanks for the update! :D as usual, it was an awesome chapter. hope i can read the next chapter soon! cheers!
| The Fuzzy Ficus 11/23/12 . chapter 27
Yay! I love this story, its so epic! ...wait if you're behind the times for previously not having a Formspring... does that make me a fossil for never ever having heard of a Formspring till now? Oh the many things on the internet that I have no clue about :)
| bowl of strawberries 11/23/12 . chapter 27
holy crap, this was such an amazing chapter. it had everything - action, the sweetest moment between callum and dahlia, and hilarity from liam. you are a writing legend, seriously. update soooon!
| booya 11/22/12 . chapter 26
how many more chapters for the story to finish? i dont want to wait forever...! please hurry, cant wait!
| Guest 11/21/12 . chapter 26
i have a weird thing of looking through reviews and i agree with you getting a FS! do it!
| Guest 11/21/12 . chapter 26
Awesome chapter! I've been reading this for a long time already :) hope to read the next chapter soon :D
| Rachie 11/19/12 . chapter 26
Hey there! I think you should get a Formspring so all your fans can ask questions and stuff! LOVEEE THIS STORY!
| girlvsherself 11/9/12 . chapter 26
Wow, I read this within the last few days and can honestly say it's one of the best stories I've ever read, can't wait for an update! You're very talented, everything is flawless! I fancy both Callum, Liam, and Dahlia too if I'm honest, heh. xo
| whisperedcares 11/4/12 . chapter 26
So, I have a lot to say, most good, but you might feel insulted at one part. Which I apologize for now, I will try to make it constructive criticism, but it's not an art I practice in, and it might come off as rude through the computer. Or annoying.
1st, I'm sad we no longer have what music you were listening to haha I enjoyed it - mostly cause it followed along my taste, and I even learned of new bands (Garbage). Do you know who Ludo or The Fratellis are? I suggest Chelsea Dagger for Fratellis, and Love Me Dead/Go-Getter Greg/Topeka from Ludo. Oh, and Paolo Nutini Jenny Don't Be Hasty/Pencil Full of Lead.
2nd, I really hope this attraction Liam is fighting with doesn't ruin the relationship he has with Dahlia or Callum. I kinda like him staying as her friend, even though I wish he had less screen time and Callum had more. Btw, what happened to the other bodyguard (Zednik?) that first appeared with Callum and Liam? He just disappeared...
Which leads to the 3rd - and the somewhat insulting part -, I'm confused. I figure there were big gaps in your chapters writing times, even though I just read them all through together. But I thought she had already done the shopping and had picked out a cocktail dress, red 'n' knee-length in the chapter when she went to get the gun from Crash? along with a shawl, inexpensive necklace, and I think heels/pantyhose?
Also, the time frame confuses me. She was stabbed Thursday night, knocked out for three; placing us in Sun, which she took off. Went in Mon, made an appointment for Tues, was attacked at the motel Wednesday meaning she should of had the party that Friday, but it seems as if many more days have passed? So was the party not that week's Friday, but the one following it?
Not that it all really matters, and the story is wonderful - captivating and attention grabbing -, but I do find my confusion a bit of a distraction, and thought maybe future readers would too.
Anyways, I love this as much as your others!