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| His Mercy's Waiting 2007-04-10 ch 1,  | abuseAww, that was a sweet poem. I advise you not to over-use commas, though. For example, the third line of the first stanza was even grammatically incorrect with that comma in there. I think the last line of the poem could've been shortened to just "to the promise land". It flows a little better. Keep writing! |