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| greenGalilee 2007-03-03 ch 1,  | abuseo.O Gorgeous. I like the likening of the capillaries to the lines of a trainway map. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-02-28 ch 1, | abuseGorgeous gorgeous gorgeous. I really love this. The line "untidy as a ** clock" really got me, and then the entire tanka as a whole just blew me away. Wow. Just incredible. Favorite. Keep writing! :) |
| Jessie Dee 2007-02-27 ch 1, | abuseQuite good. Didn't care for the comparison of capillaries to the lines of a map, but otherwise excellent. |
| a silenced revolution 2007-02-27 ch 1, | abuseI love the metaphors (or at least I hope they are metaphors :D). Great write. Keep it up! ~:Isabella May:~ |