you say " I have four siblings, two older brothers and a younger sister. My oldest brother, Makoto, attends a technical school and still lives at home." there's only three siblings mentioned there later on, you correct yourself, but it's a little confusing. i think this story is really great. Satsue is a very compilcated character and when people expect her to do something, it seems like she normally does the opposite. that's very cool.

oh! pretty!

tall side of short. i love that phrase! it's so cool! this story seems to be really good. i like it.

I really like this story. Your characters are quite interesting and so is your plot (well, from what I've seen so far). There's a few spelling errors, but besides that, it's all good. Keep it up!

aw! these last two chapters were really cute! loved them! hope ya update real soon!

Hm...first off, know that Romance isn't huge on my list of favorite genres, so my review might be a tiny bit biased.

I loved the idea; two insecure-as-hell people meeting and falling in love but hating themselves more than they love sounds like an excellent formula for some excellent angst.

But currently, we don't have much insecurity for either character, and the romance is...vague, at best. Share more in the way of your characters' feelings.

The characters themselves are good, but I find myself desiring more information on all of them. Especially Saiyuri.

The best parts are the descriptions; the scenery, and the feelings, when you get around to describing them.

Finally, I don't like the setup of the fourth chapter at all. We need some sweet things that the two lovers are doing when the other is describing their life, as well as the other's reactions.

This could be excellent with some editing. Good luck.

definitely not the run-of-the-mill romances out there - and certainly a welcome read in the manga genre. you have great command of your prose; there are touches and brushes of reality in each paragraph. though some parts of the story and plot feel a little forced, it was still delightful read with engaging characters and a promising plot. expecting nothing less on the next post.

kakyou

oh this story sounds so interesting. i liked how you discribled everything. i even like the characters. hope ya update soon. oh and before i forget if you want...you can read my story Kokoro. trust me if you give it a chance it is really interesting. and if you weren't mind reviewing it that would be great too. but love the story so far!