Not bad content, but your syntax could do with revision to help the flow; perhaps a comma after 'intoxicated' and the removal of the comma after 'fills me up' would help. Also, a semi colon after 'again' and a full stop after 'never finish' would do wonders for the flow of the piece.

Otherwise it was a nice read.

Keep writing,

Alan.

aah interesting idea though u have a spelling mistake...