You may not be crazy about it but i really like it. It shows how sometimes you feel really miserable, like you're falling apart, but you know you'll be okay by the next day. I hope i got that right... :)

Thanks so much for your reviews, they really helped, and i definitely get what you meant about it being choppy and being a bit forced. I tried to do a little bit to fix them. This poem flows really well.

this is an awesome poem, your rhymes are really really good!