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| Dot Cubed 2008-07-24 ch 23,  | abuseI feel like this couldn't have ended any other way. I thought their goodbye was perfect and I especially liked the part where you could sort of see Ella moving on--maybe the part where she said he was only her first love. I feel bad for Alex, and the fact that he felt suicide was his only option--but the reader sort of knew that was coming in the beginning, or at least I could see it coming. He'd gone in too deep to ever extract himself. I just hope Ella can move on and find some sort of happiness without him, because she deserves it. |
| Dot Cubed 2008-07-24 ch 20, | abuseMax is totally the voice of reason in this. I feel so bad for him and I'm totally rooting for him. Also, the story would be easier to read if you'd put who's speaking at parts, especially the scene with Emily and Ella. I had no idea she was talking to Emily until you revealed it in the middle. |
| Dot Cubed 2008-07-24 ch 19, | abuseOkay, so. I have to say, I hate how Ella is so dependant on Alex. Like, it gets to a point where I just want her to grow a backbone! She's way too dependant on this self-destructive boy and it kind of pains me to watch her throw away her life like this. It's kind of like Bella in Twilight, who's so dependant on Edward for every little thing. The fact that I'm so upset about this just shows that this is such a good story, in that your characters are so real to me. I just hope Alex gets some help, because right now he's manipulating Ella and it makes me feel so bad for her. |
| YoungInside 2008-06-22 ch 22, | abuseI normally don't feel the story that strongly but the letter from alex made me cry. He was so beautiful. wonderful job. |
| fieney 2008-05-09 ch 22, | abusei forgot something. I'm pretty sure that at the beginning Alex' "big brother" was named Seth and than he was suddenly this other guy, whose name I can't remember... Anyway, maybe I'm mistaken, but if you want to you can look it up. |
| fieney 2008-05-09 ch 23, | abuseMy favourite part was the prolouge. I'm still not sure if I like how you give barely to nothing information about some things, for example the minor characters and all those things. But, yes, I like it how you only concentrate on one thing, it wouldn't do any other way. And I have to give you credit for writing so beautifully about love. About this love where you completely and utterly devote yourselve to the other person. I love reading about love, I think it's because can't really believe in it myself, in this love anyway, and knowing that other people are able to believe in it makes it somewhat better. So thanks for this. I really appreciate it. |
| Ambergirl1029 2008-04-29 ch 16, | abusehello, since i have read your story and loved it can you do me the itsy bitsy favor of reading my first ever, baby story I Am Brandy Williams thank you, Amber |
| Lies for Liars 2008-04-23 ch 22, | abuseohohohmygod. im about to cry. that is so sad, and so amazing and so incredicable. i loved this story so much, way beyond so much. nice job. keep writing... |
| Lies for Liars 2008-04-23 ch 21, | abuseLAST CHAPTER!? *SOBS* i love this :). nice job, i really like how u made her mom be all good like and turn around...but i wonder what he wants... |
| Lies for Liars 2008-04-23 ch 20, | abuseohgeez. that was sad :\. it made me wanna cry. i hate goodbyes. hey, just an idea, when people are talking, i'd put whos speaking every few lines, itll make it less confusing |
| Lies for Liars 2008-04-22 ch 19, | abusethat his name was seth! nice job, this chapter was kinda confusing... |
| Lies for Liars 2008-04-22 ch 18, | abuseohmygod! i totally thought it was alex calling her. i hope hes ok. and i kinda wicked hate emily |
| Lies for Liars 2008-04-22 ch 17, | abusenice job. i loved the confronation with her and alex. i wish i had the guts to say all of that. nice job :) |
| Lies for Liars 2008-04-22 ch 16, | abuseoh my god. that is so scar and creepy. and i cant wait to keep reading. nice job :) |
| Lies for Liars 2008-04-22 ch 15, | abuseWAIT. WHO IS SHE! I WANNA KNOW NOW! nice job. a cliffy. i love it. |