Aw, how cute. It really paints a picture. I love your focus on the different eyes of everyone involved. and the idea of "over-fluffed clouds" And it's a lovely depiction of the relationship between a grandfather and granddaughter. Nice job

Greype Juice

Really cute. It's funny: you write really depressing stories, but then you turn around and write something really child-related. And you excel in both. You have a very interesting style. I hope to read more soon!

I especially like that you don't feel the need to rhyme, thank you

I enjoy this poem immensly
but i do think you could use stronger words... to convey your point and enhance the situation

but the simplicity is nice too so it's up to you