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| Otseis Ragnarok 2007-07-23 ch 5,  | abuse...And your love for cookies shines through in ways unmentionable. As for the randomness factor, that is the truest charm of this tale. And this 'surprise' love... I kinda saw it coming. Almost from the start, I knew Lynnette would fall for one of the two. (Did that sound too mean?) Until next time. |
| Otseis Ragnarok 2007-04-12 ch 4, | abuseNice. Very nice description of Abstinence man's powers. As for your comments at the beginning, I read ALL of them, but I'll only love you if you turn out to actually be Lynette. (I know, sad, but... c'mon!) As for the actual chapter, I loved the randomness, especially that Wayne Newton comment. Hating someone for THAT reason just proves her instability.(and why I love her... kidding... maybe.) As for your rating? this chapter gets a FIVE out of SEVEN. Nothing really bad about it, but This chapter just lacks that... spark. |
| Otseis Ragnarok 2007-03-13 ch 3, | abuseI have one VERY important question: What kind of special powers does Abstinance Man have? He has a theme song, so why not special powers? Also, I am glad to see that Lynnette got some cookies, but how about that cheese? Even if he IS Abstinance Man, That didn't stop him from trying... did it? Yet another 'hero' fallen from grace... *SIGH* Regardless, keep up the good work. And one more thing before I close out with a review. Where can I find the Abstinance song? Based on your description, I laughed for about 10 minutes straight. And you get a SIX out of SEVEN. |
| Limera 2007-03-12 ch 3, | abusenice update. move faster tho and make the chappies longer...cpmbone some...deadline and stuff can wait...the quotient and content is more important...=) |
| Otseis Ragnarok 2007-03-09 ch 2, | abuseUmm...yeah, velcro is awesome! Anyway... This is getting better,and what do you mean,"will never have anything more than friendship"? the romanceis there, and so frickin' obvious, that even I can see it.And I am the least romantic guy on the planet! Regardless, the story is great, and Lynn is a great character. As of now, this story gets a FIVE out of SEVEN. |
| Limera 2007-03-03 ch 2, | abuseWOW. it must be great to a college persons story- im stuck doing a high school story and since i graduated recently i just want to fast forward to college but im still doing a sophomore story. BAH. anyway GOOD LUCK WITH THE STORY! |
| Otseis Ragnarok 2007-02-28 ch 1, | abuseThis character is AMAZING! The kind of lady I'd Love to meet.(except for her possible crush/relationship with Andy). The kind of chick who'd go through all that for a cookie, and act like its nothing... Nice! As a story, I'll hold back ion a rating until the next chapter. I need to know where this is going. |