Wow...that's quite the poem. Well done.

Great job! This was very nice and you had a good motivation to write it. Lost in a whirl of night. This line is in the second stanza, it is a little confusing. Also, when you are talking about death in the first stanza, it makes you have to change gears from life to death a lot. If you move the first stanza to the end, it will sound a lot better. God Bless!

Nice rhyming... I always have trouble with that because I meake it sound as if I'm just putting in words to rhyme that don't really belong in the poem, but you have obviously overcome that obstacle. i like how it's simple, but heartfelt. i especially love the line "and you will live in water". it just sounds so peaceful. I also like how you progressed from her birth to her death. It makes the piece flow well. nice job!

aw! sweet!

Aww, how sweet.

My pastor was saying how the baptism of a brother or sister is the greatest cause for celebration last Sunday.

So, really, I am overjoyed.

:)

I loved this poem, it was so beautifully written and I could see that you put a lot of thought into it.

I loved the third stanza, especially, because it's so true.

I'm beginning to value everything more and your work was just so moving.

:)

May God bless you.

Very pretty! I love it! And yay for Rebekah's baptism!