Bitterly beautiful, irony. The first sequence and the last stanza both stood out to me--the first for its everydayness, the second for its sadness. the middle ones strayed a little from the theme, I think, esp. the actress one...keep bringing it back to little, almost unremarkable things. That's waht made the first bit so powerful. Keep up the excellent work,

scribbs.

I like the descriptions and the flow and the way you describe the people, but it left me slightly confused.. are the people you go into depth about the same as the ones you mention by name or different and the ending although heartbreaking seems odd because Adam wasn't a flower (at least I don't think so)... but the piece was still very beautifully written

The narrative is interesting and moves well, but I do not know if the form is necessary or warranted; that is, the tanka is a form and a subject, not merely the former. It is no great offense, but I wonder what caused you to use the tanka structure in the first place. And the implications of "a baby girl whose name had nothing to do with flowers" are both poignant and chilling. This ending is wonderful.

I LOVE HAIKU! AND I LOVE THIS ONE!

There was no grammar errors as far as I could see, and the rhythm was dead-on! You may bow to your audience if you like.

Oh yeah that was awsome. Good work.

Maggot.

Gorgeous! Its so simple, and sweet...The flow is just--wow, gorgeous; I feel like I'm lost in somesort of summer rain or something...its sort of like a short storyline, the way the words are simplified and strung across the entire poem is great. and the ending to then brings you down--but all in one, a gorgeous and beautiful poem.

lovely.

This is so beautifully written, i could not have even came close to writing something this well. Great job!