So I've been reading all your posted work and I have to say, you write so beautifully! I love your style and how concise your prose is...extra words would be superfluous and would detract from your writing.

However, I've also noticed that there are a few grammatical errors scattered throughout all your pieces. For example, in this piece you write "I didn't like the older kids, they were rude and brash and I had better things to do than waste my time on them, but then why was he the center of my world all of a sudden?" where the first comma should be a colon. Little things like that.

But other than that...I will probably be favoriting you as an author :)

I will forgive you for ending that last sentence with a preposition, because hell, you really can't end a sentence like that another way. A good piece, though I didn't enjoy it as much as I liked your other one... though it was a nice flash of life.
~Cristina