Pretty imagery but I have no clue what you're talking about. I'm assuming it's a metaphor for something but I"m too tired for metaphors hahaha! The alliteration seems out of place here, and if you had more on this... I don't see how. It has no plot. It's just a scene. A pretty scene, but a kind of random scene. Good for practicing imagery, though. I feel like I can see the waterfall.

-Jesse

Another beautiful piece! You're very talented and you can easily see that through your writing. I envy your vocabulary! ^^ You use it so well. Excellent job, once again!

This kind of reminded me of meditation for some reason, I have no idea as to why exactly. ^^