 youdrive_illride, from Neo 2007-04-28 . chapter 1 Why are his eyes "unearthly"?
"Payed" is "paid," by the way.
I have to say that I like your character, but many of your sentences are a little too bulky for my taste. Some of them, though, are very nice and show a lot of promise (IMO).
"sunk" at the end is "sank."
Keep writing. I think you might go someplace. ^^ |