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youdrive_illride, from Neo 2007-04-28 . chapter 1
Why are his eyes "unearthly"?

"Payed" is "paid," by the way.

I have to say that I like your character, but many of your sentences are a little too bulky for my taste. Some of them, though, are very nice and show a lot of promise (IMO).

"sunk" at the end is "sank."

Keep writing. I think you might go someplace. ^^
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