As I told another New user in reference to the upload being down. FP used to cost money to join. Now its free. I guess its a simple as that. when stuff is free we cant complain no? However there is a way to get around the current problem it's rather complicated to Ill PM that yo you. Onto the review.

"Belle, had broken one of the most sacred of rules in the world of Midius, which was to never bare child with a mortal."

To never bare child with a mortal? This statement is rather unclear. Do you mean that she was not allowed to have a baby by a mortal or that she was not allowed to lay with a mortal. I assume the latter but the way you have it written is rather ambiguous.

K the poem. I dont dislike it Im just not sure if it fits the setting. yet. Well im not sure when the setting is. so once I figure that out Ill let you know if I think the poem fits or not.

"The war was over, and peace had been returned to the (land) but still sadness filled the (land)."
Something that you really want to avoid is repeating Adjectives or certain nouns. Especially where you can help it. One of those lands need to be world or earth or whatever the plants name is. It distracts the reader when you reuse descriptions.

Hmm the background on the demons may need to be expanded a little bit. You wrote that the Gods wanted to kill mankind. thats fine then you write that the demons blood lust lead them to believe that they were created only to kill? well in actuality they were only created for the purpose of killing. Unless you know of some other purpose that you didnt share with the reader.

hm... Ok I read your authors note.

may I make a suggestion? I would recommend that you put your absolute best work forward on this site. it not only keeps up the quality of the stories on this site, but it also reinforces your ability to get helpful reviews. If you post your best work you get critiqued on how you can do better. If you post just off the top of your head you get reviews about stuff that you are already aware of but just didnt fix cause it was off the cuff.

The concept seems pretty interesting, if not wholly original. It still seems like it could go well.

Again reading back over your work a few times may clarify to you why some of your sentences and descriptions are too blunt and some are awkward. If you would like examples Id be glad to point them out to you by way of a PM. Happy writing.
Also as of right now I really do not wish to return reviews for Soul in the Shell as it needs heavy editing. So if it pleases you to read it go right ahead. However I suggest another story as they were written more recently and a review on those will help me to improve my current style. Not my style from two years ago which was full of tense errors and odd descriptions.