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Reviews For: The Heretic

girl without wings 2007-12-27 ch 1,	abuseI thoroughly enjoyed this piece. I really don’t think you should take it down. Writing something different is good and quite brave. It’s a learning experience, even (and perhaps especially) if the attempt fails or doesn’t yield the response you were looking for. Anyway, I did not interpret this to be some sort of love story. As I read this I saw green— boiling jealousy and vicious envy. I got this sort of spider-and-fly image in my head: an angry spider, jealous of the fly that can get away, promising to devour the fly upon its return. Maybe this is nothing like what you intended, but I think the real beauty of poetry is that a good poem transforms into something different for every reader. This is, admittedly, a bit foggy. But who doesn’t like a poem that could mean multiple things or that challenges the reader? I have to comment on the last stanza. It’s absolutely brilliant. It’s so dark and harsh and chock full of possible meanings. I loved the line, “choking on the snakes scraping at your tongue.” Brutal. And I love the image of spitting apple seeds at angels, a defiant image that evokes memories of Eden. Finally, I think the line that prompted the comment about missing words was, “as i lift you up so can fall into the sky,” which could be interpreted to be missing an “I” or “you.” Maybe that line is just as you intended it, but maybe you should alter it a bit if it’s throwing people off. This is an enchanting poem, but it is somewhat muddy. Maybe clearing the water of a few pieces of flotsam and jetsam would garner the interpretations and reactions you were going for. -- marie
wordsworth in a garbage can 2007-07-09 ch 1,	abusethis is a bit different than what i've come to expect of you. really- i can't interpret much of it as may you have intended- i kind of just soak up in the beauty of it. love the last stanza the most, and of course the opening line.
spiderfly 2007-06-17 ch 1,	abuseI have read only one of your poems other than this, and I prefer this one. That is why the note at the bottom surprised me. This poem is full of beautiful imagery, and it still lingers in my mind. It makes me feel like I'm going to stop breathing any moment. I think this poem is utterly captivating. And I did not think of lovers at all. If I had to think of a relationship within the poem, I'd think mother and son. But maybe that's because of the Bethlehem reference.
lackluster 2007-03-09 ch 1,	abusei thought the ending was powerful. it left me with a image that's hard to forget. i must say, i was quite sick of the word chains by the end, but if you must make your point. overall, i think this is very very fascinating.
Lana Mira Beth 2007-03-05 ch 1,	abuseIt's actually not as bad as that other reviewer said it was. (Don't worry, x.x.suicide gave me a crappy review as well.)Anyway, there are some words missing, but the imagery is actually quite nice. It's pretty good. And thanks for the review!:)
philosophy.on.acid 2007-03-05 ch 1,	abuseif you're going to write about something so serious, then at least have it make sense; don't make it about a love story just because you can't think of any other direction for the poem to take. It's called originality. You should look it up.

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