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| LilyChan x 2007-04-13 ch 1,  | abuseThis story looks promising. :] I'll watch it to see how far you can take it. I anticipate the next chapter. ♥ But don't take too long! |
| The Burning Rose 2007-03-08 ch 2, | abuseWazup!! This is a grat start to a story. I love the action already and the characterization is brilliant. Hey, I am a thirteen year old writer and I want some help with some of my stories. Could you R&R mine so I can get better. Keep up the good work and tell me when you update please. |
| Madness-Soldier 2007-03-07 ch 1, | abuseThis is very interesting. Your main character Janus reminds me of Gene from Samurai Champloo. I am going to love seeing him take the guards and rip out their intestines...oops, gave away an idea :). Anyway I like how this has started off and I just hopes it gets ultraviolent from here. I corrupt from within... The Madness, member of aka Meteor Infinity P.S. When you get the time I do hope you can check out my story Guilty Act which I think you will really enjoy. Its very violent I warn you. |
| Hikari no Roojii 2007-03-07 ch 1, | abuseI really liked it. Your descriptions of the environment and the way the people live were very clear. I did notice the sentence structure get a little strange in places though. "Two guards led him through a rope tied to his neck; the same rope that he was to be hanged him." For example. But apart from those little mistakes, very well written I thought. I hope you write more of this. |
| almosteasy 2007-03-06 ch 1, | abuseHello! My first thought was, "well written". Great even, by internet standards. Very readable, no messy sentence structures or misused words can be found throughout the text. (It's what I dislike the most =P) Plotwise, the first chapter did what it needed to do: It got my attention. I personally wish the relation between the tree story and Janus could be cleared up a bit more before the chapter ended, more than the allusion to the striking snake and the phrase "Like a cycle". Thanks for the story! -E |
| Spirit Tigress 2007-03-06 ch 1, | abuseThis is excellent! I especially like the first half where you were decribing the Wasteland. Update soon! |
| symbiotic 2007-03-06 ch 1, | abuseNice beginning to a story that I'm liking so far. Hope there is more. |