This story looks promising. :] I'll watch it to see how far you can take it. I anticipate the next chapter. ♥ But don't take too long!

Wazup!! This is a grat start to a story. I love the action already and the characterization is brilliant. Hey, I am a thirteen year old writer and I want some help with some of my stories. Could you R&R mine so I can get better. Keep up the good work and tell me when you update please.

This is very interesting. Your main character Janus reminds me of Gene from Samurai Champloo. I am going to love seeing him take the guards and rip out their intestines...oops, gave away an idea :). Anyway I like how this has started off and I just hopes it gets ultraviolent from here.

I corrupt from within...

The Madness, member of aka Meteor Infinity

P.S. When you get the time I do hope you can check out my story Guilty Act which I think you will really enjoy. Its very violent I warn you.

I really liked it. Your descriptions of the environment and the way the people live were very clear.

I did notice the sentence structure get a little strange in places though.

"Two guards led him through a rope tied to his neck; the same rope that he was to be hanged him." For example.

But apart from those little mistakes, very well written I thought.

I hope you write more of this.

Hello!

My first thought was, "well written". Great even, by internet standards. Very readable, no messy sentence structures or misused words can be found throughout the text. (It's what I dislike the most =P)

Plotwise, the first chapter did what it needed to do: It got my attention. I personally wish the relation between the tree story and Janus could be cleared up a bit more before the chapter ended, more than the allusion to the striking snake and the phrase "Like a cycle".

Thanks for the story!

-E

This is excellent! I especially like the first half where you were decribing the Wasteland. Update soon!

Nice beginning to a story that I'm liking so far. Hope there is more.