Found you! Why do you hide these things of awesomeness from me!

This:

//“You were – are – amazing. You’re… Michael I didn’t think anyone would ever want me and I didn’t think I’d ever want anyone else because my family was everything to me. But then you did and I did but I didn’t think, I thought you would leave because I thought you could do so much better and I just… I loved – love – you and I wanted…”//

Was very awesome, and made it hard for me to breathe a little, I think. I love the lines of yours that sound so natural that I can hear them being spoken--they're exactly how I'd picture someone speaking, every word totally natural, and I think you have a really good feel for people's speech patterns. It seems like many of these lines were said aloud to get them exactly right--and if they weren't, that's just more to your credit with how effortless you can do this.

Something else I wanted to say about this story is that I love the detail with your characters' expressions, thoughts and emotions. You're a technical master of showing and not telling, but no, it's way more than that: you get right into the core of what these people are about, but better yet, you do it in a way that's interesting and engaging to read about, and that's probably one of my favorite things with your writing. I skim so many emotional descriptions from other writers, even writers who are, in other ways, extremely talented--they depress me because so very few writers really get how to do emotions. And as the psychology geek, I love to read about it when it's done right, and you do it right.

So yes, I found this and I love it, and thought you might like a nice Easter present review. :)

Cheers,

Azelma/Katie/I-think-you-know-who-this-is

Cute =) I love all the little details you have.