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| Shadow Link 2007-03-07 ch 5, | Wow. Deap-seated ironic tragedy. I'm a senior myself and, though I'm a guy, it's easy to relate to the story. For such a short piece, it communicates a lot, emotionally. Also, I liked how you broke things up into smaller chapters. It gave the story a better, broken flow. |
| maggie 2007-03-06 ch 5, | Oh my God, Kerstyn I love you and hate you at the same time. It felt rushed to begin with, like it should be a short story but instead a book. But the ending. I sort of hate you for that ending as much as I like the story. |