i thought i'd written a review for this story but then i checked my history and found i hadn't, so i decided to come back and write one. this is by far the best vampire story that i've read on fp yet. and before you think that this is the first one i've come across, let me tell you it isn't, but without a doubt it's fantabulous.
very quickly i became extremely attached to your writing style. i particularly like how you structured each chapter, with the literature extracts and journal entries that made up the start of each one. even when they weren't signed (the entries i mean) i was able to comprehend who was writing and what the following chapter would entail. i also liked how it gave brief snippets of the story in the other characters' prespectives.
often, the first person narration doesn't come off as sophisticated as third person, but you certainly pulled it off.
i'm also really picky with grammatical errors and the like, but i found virtually none, which i was EXTREMELY pleased about. it's not too often you come across a story on fp that has perfect grammar and spelling and is practically perfect.
i really liked this story. the only thing that was a bit disappointing for me was that i was able to easily figure out what was going on whenever there were plot twists and surprises. although that probably isn't a fault on your part, more so mine in the sense that i'm known for being quite perceptive. regardless of this minor detail, i was still continuously eager to read on and find out what was going to happen, no matter how clued in i was.
i thoroughly enjoyed every minute of reading this story. i'm onto the sequel at the moment, so expect another review from me real soon. thanks heaps for this awesome read. it was so entertaining.

jess

I'm glad that I read this story, it's quite nice to read a story set in England once in a while and not the usual American culture that comes through in most pieces on Fictionpress. Thank you very much, it was a facinating read.

I really enjoyed your story, it was very descriptive and held my attention from start to finish.

You've won the award for most original circumstances surrounding a turning. Trapped in an elevator? Really?

Absolutely brilliant.

BRILLIANT. I really loved how you made Lexie confess her love later in the story. Sometimes when the main character confesses true love too early in the story, I feel like there's no point in reading the story since they've already fallen in love. BUT! With yours, it really captured my heart and this is one of my very favourite original vampire stories. Great job! I know I'll be reading the sequel! :)

Awesome way to start a story. I'm helplessly in love with it already!
//Bella

Good first chapter. [: It kept me interested. And the whole idea of being stuck in a lift was different than anything I've ever read. So, thank you for your creativity.

Woah.

That is all.

you should post this story (and others) on
its a website where no one can copy and paste your work, and each month, harper collins publinshing company goes through the best stories, and publishes the best novel. you have potential, you should really try it.

I absolutely LOVED this story! Very well written

heyy
i la la loved this story
the plot, the humour bahh everything
E and on top ofthat there is a sequel e!!
ahaha and i think this is my first time reading a vampire so that makes it realistic. you get what i mean? anyways me soo reading the sequel :D

Hello there, I've just finished reading your story and I have to say it was amazing. I really liked how how introduced both quotes and journal entries. These journal entries really made the story feel much more realistic plus it provided much insight onto the various characters and their mindsets.

The pacing and flow was done very well and overall I can't wait to start reading the sequel.

P.S: If you don't mind I would appreciate if you could read some of my work and give feedback on it.

That was the best story I have ever read on here. You are a very good writer. So I was hoping you could help me on some of my stories. I'm having terrible writer's block so I was hoping you could give me some plot ideas.

WOW , I must say I loved this story. You took idea's that I have had for years about vampires and made it into a great story. Thank you! it was awesome.

Hey, It's really good so far. :D
I love her best friend's name (Thea).
That's my name too and it's the first time I have seen it on FictionPress.
-Thea