A very captivating prologue! I look forward to reading more of your work.

Good prologue. Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have an excellent day.

Twilight Starr

I was really starting to get upset for Arianne because she can't go home, but then when Theoforte said: "Oi! Get up and wipe the Tambling slobber from your nose!" Theoforte chided. "We've all been stuck in this mess, and some of us with bigger problems than you!" I couldn't help but burst out laughing. This chapter really resparked my intrest in the story. It was mysterious and got the reader looking forward to the next chapter, but it also gave the readers a chance to get to know the characters better. Nicely done! Update soon! )

thnks for clearing up everything in this chp! keep writing!

Yeah... I'm not too sure poking the "king" with a sword was such a magnificent idea after all...hehe. Anyway, I like how this chapter is going. Very interesting and imaginative. Although I got a little nauseous at your description of the king. I'm liking the characters more and more each chapter! And Quess too!

Great chapter! Update soon!

u finally updated...geez...i was beginning to lose hope.

but why did she choose to poke the king?

and i got a lil confused about Quess was talking about near the end.

I like this! I wonder what the Bunny King looks like?

I liked it... My story is in the same C2 and I find it funny the way all the stiries are completly diferent from each other.

Keep up the good work.

wow! this is really good! and i love how you hint to the idea behind the story! i think i may understand as of yet. or at least im hyper and will come back to this w/ a blank mind and scream in confusion. Either way... i enjoy it more than cookies!

yikes...how bad is this bunny king?

i like the way you depicted the earth as biased and such...it really does reflect our world today.

Ooh! I can't wait to read more! Everything is described so well and you painted such a clear image! I've never thought of bunnies to be pink or green before but I really like the idea. I love Theoforte already and I'm anxiously awaiting the next chapter!

No pressure or anything ;)

)

Again, you have a lovely use of words. You find a way to meld beautiful words and sentence forms together to create a stimulating peice. However, I do find the plot a little hard to follow. I understand that the peice is abstract. While abstract can be a good thing, to much abstract can get confusing and make it difficult for the reader to clearly follow what is going on. Over all it is still an excellent peice, and as always you grammer is impecable. I wish (and my teachers too) that I had your use of grammer. As always God Bless.

-Ivory

I must say that I am impressed with your ability to take a peice that is almost seemingly stream of concious and entwine a plethora of vocabulary well beyond your age, and create an amazing and stimulating peice. I look forward to the next instalment. God Bless.

-Ivory

Round up those plot bunnies! They need to get working! -Feeds plot bunnies more reviews- This is a beautiful piece. The first part was terribly sad but I liked the next part better. It reminds me of Alice in Wonderland a bit. Your descriptions are lovely and I still wish I had that vocabulary of yours. Excellent work! Update soon please!