Reviews for salmonberries at sunset

Doublebassrob 2007-03-07 ch 1,	This is the first poem I have come across on this site where I've instantly thought 'wow'. It feels delicate, yet intensely passionate and sexual. The way you vary the sentence lengths further accentuates the passionate feel created by the enjambement and the imagery of the fruit. Loved 'thump-**-thump', its really catchy. Just that one expletive really pulls that line out. Correct 'An' to 'And' at the end of the second stanza; im sure you've noticed this. 'It was an accident' would've sufficed on its own without 'in the end'. The latter part of that sentence feels out of place. Overall though, I really enjoyed reading this. It's not like a great deal of the 'obvious' love poetry; you've sidestepped some cliches but stayed in territory that is identifiable reading. You also provoked me to look up 'Salmonberries' Cheers! Rob
nighthuntress05 2007-03-06 ch 1,	Your imagery and metaphors are outstanding. I especially loved the last line. Great job.
temerity 2007-03-06 ch 1,	Excellent. You have a gift for imagery... Always write on!