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| dragonflydreamer 2008-04-21 ch 1, | This is a very interesting story. I'd really like it if you coninued. So is the idea of "a girl without a face" just a reference to her physical disfiguration, or will it adapt a more metaphorical sense later on, as well? You did a lovely job of showing the transition of the main character. You started by establishing her innocence, then built it up to her realization of her "ugliness." I don't know if you've ever read Wicked, but she really reminds me of Elphaba (though Elphie could hardly be described as innocent even the minute after she was born ^^) The only thing I'd reccomend inmproving is that it seemed to repeat himself a bit after a while. Other than that, I found this story quite good. I hope you decide to continue it! |
| Agent Firefly 2007-05-15 ch 1, | Wow. You should definitely continue this story. This was a beautiful beginning. The story of a "faceless" girl seems difficult to take on, but certainly worth writing. I loved this first part and I hope you continue. |
| Forever Forbidden 2007-03-06 ch 1, | Hmm. Nice beginning. It could be very interesting, where this may lead. Write on. -Helen |