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| rassoodock 2008-05-16 ch 1,  | abusehot. |
| angel953 2008-03-29 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful. Simply beautiful. You used few words, but that is all the better in this case. There were only a few words that I thought made this maturish. I don't know though. If it was me writing, I'd probably put it as teen with a strong cautioning in the summary. It's up to you though. Just a thought. And, thank goodness for this, it wasn't nearly as descriptive as what I thought I was about to face when I clicked on this. Nice work here. ~cake Once again as i said in all the other reviews i left for you, plz dont use the review reply function thx |
| XxInDreamsWeRestxX 2008-03-27 ch 1, | abuseI thought it was pretty cool. I love to read poetry, even write it sometimes, but I have found that a lot of my poetry of yesterday doesn't make much sense today lol. But loved it. |
| Sarah Allie 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseWell, it's very well-written, and the prose is beautiful. It's a bit too... mature (if you know what I mean :P) for my liking, but a gorgeous poem nontheless :) Sarah :) x The Review Game |
| Koneko Plushie 2007-12-09 ch 1, | abuseThat was actually good. :) You were able to stay on track, and keep the rhythm perfect. Which was awesome. Keep writing! ^^ |
| sdavis2k 2007-08-02 ch 1, | abuseVery good prose. |
| Rapture Whispers 2007-06-08 ch 1, | abuseInteresting topic :) The lines "moans echo throughout the room" and "My essence released" are my fav. The last line is a fantastic ending for it. One of the images I got from it was like a curve, low at the beginning, the peak was, of course, the part about the climax, then "released" represents the low part of the curve at the end. Did this really happen to you? Sorry, you don't have to answer that, if you don't want to. |
| Jodi147 2007-06-08 ch 1, | abusevery well written! hurray for haikus! |
| Ivory Byrd 2007-06-07 ch 1, | abusevery well composed, you got that haiku stuff down pretty well, i hate writing poetry myself, but you do it well! |
| InViSiBlE wOmAn 2007-05-14 ch 1, | abuseit's short but nonetheless great, this is a good line: Moans echo throughout the room it's very well written |
| mamma DX 2007-03-16 ch 1, | abuseIt's very pretty. I would've added another part about... well you know, before the climax and after the thrust. |