I didn't really like this until the end, but now I do :D

D:! :_: So good... Sorry, can't expound, just, wow. That ending was a killer.

I nodded and walked away, but I really just hid behind the bathrooms to watch where he would go. He with his white trashbags, from a certain distance, looked like he was bobbing on clouds. He loaded the puffs into a white Celica, and stepped inside. I waited for the sound of the ignition gunning, but it didn't come.

Three hours passed and the car didn't drive away.

:_;

but everything else was awesome too. Flawless descrpitions. A few spelling errors, but I'll point those out to you later.

Damn good. It sounds like a short series just be careful not to make it too short, too long even. hahahhaa Damn, this was some good stuff, perhaps the best thing i've ever read of yours so far. I'll expound as it progresses though, it was totally, mentally captovating.

Favorite lines:

You see places and meet people when you’re real solid and you’re so solid and secure that they don’t really matter at that point, latently pivotal point when you had first discovered them. It’s not until you’re ready to kill yourself or someone else or you’re in the middle of a midlife crisis that you start reevaluating everything and everyone you’ve ever known, looking for answers, hints, clues that can tell you why you’ve been pushed to the edge.

(damn!)

You even start thinking of people as random, irresponsible, and obnoxious as my friend Dave, or someone else more ** up than you, like the Tin Can Prince of Echo Park. But more often than not, you’ll think of the Daves, because they frequent your life, prowl, look for your points of interest, your one vulnerability, your darkness, and they curl there until they eat you from the inside out.

(double damn!)

But it really is your fault because you let them. Maybe you’re just too nice to think that’s what they’re doing to you, or you’re arrogant as all hell and think it’d never happen to you because you’re special. I was—and will always be—the latter, constantly shifting because of disillusionment.

(TURKEY DAMN!)

The ending scenes were pretty powerful as well.pretty damn crazy. Sorry dave, but the prince got to her first XD!

Beginning of a small addicting series! Ha