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Rock on an Ocean Shore 2007-07-10 . chapter 1
Lol. Wonderful first line.

I love your descriptions, especially of the smell on Robert's pillow and its symbolism in regards to Andrew.

Nice one-shot. :D
Aquarian Angel 2790 2007-03-07 . chapter 1
hehe. Best First Line EVER!i once started a story with a similar line.
this was really cute, i loved the description of their individual smell. People think im crazy when i say people have a certain unique smell and how i can tell who wore my sweater, my mom or sis depending on the smell left behind.
you obviously understand:D
Limited Edition 2007-03-07 . chapter 1
WAHAHAHA gotta love the first sentence XD So much suspense! I like the characters. They're natural and realistic. The author's voice is nice, it has a relaxed atmosphere in this piece. He doesn't wash his hairdye out or something?! My pillow smells of fricking Garnier hair wax XD I use it. A lot. It smells so damn good, but on the pillow it makes you sneeze. I like that detail here though, it's a good way of describing the thoughts, the loneliness. A smart trick I'd say. (I bet you didn't actually think of that, but then...smart writers don't. They have IT). Mwaahahahaha so cute. I wanna see how they mush their head into the pillow (hint hint).
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