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| lizetm 2008-02-10 ch 9, anon. | abuseTHEY NEED TO BE TOGETHER! That last bit made me sad. :( She needs to run away with him, she'll be protected from her idiot husband, and they both will have someone who loves them. Hurry up and update! :D Its so good! |
| lizetm 2008-02-09 ch 6, anon. | abuseAH! I LOVE this story! I'll be honest, I didn't think I was going to like it much, but I did. It grabbed me from the beginning, I love that you started most of it with the little girl's perspective. It tore at my heart reading what she's gone through. It written beautifully, very good use of detail description and all that. *sucks at reviews* I can't wait to read more. Haha, knowing who you've 'casted' to play the main characters, I can't wait for Naomi and Johnathan to get together, she needs better. ...OMG! I just saw that there are more chps! How could I have missed them?! *is an idiot* *goes to read* :) |
| TwystedFate 2007-03-18 ch 3,  | abuseI really like this one. I know how hard it is to write about little girls/familial abuse (I've got a piece from the POV of a six year old girl as well!) and you've really captured Abby's heart. I'd love to keep reading. |
| Darkening Mist 2007-03-08 ch 1, | abuseYour story is cliché, but alright. A tip: Proofread, and never say 'I suck at summaries' in your summary. Especially not with chatspeak; it makes people have assumptions of your story that aren't compelling them to read it (I, personally, thought that your writing would be ditsy and without captials and stuff. It wasn't, but that's the impression I got.) Cheers, Me. ((Darkening Mist)) |