with a title like that- you just have to read it. and you served it justice. i can't fathom why i never thought of the phrase "van gogh stars" before. not that i'd steal that from you, it just seems so perfect. i'm not sure about the formatting of humiliated but it does seem to add something so i can't give you any critique other than deserved praise.

The art references here are fantastic, as well as the descriptions. "light collapsing on the cracked vase" is original and poetical in a way I would kill to be able write like.

This poem is very interesting and descriptive.

~**~Indiana~**~

So many powerful statements in this: "Lately she's been the knocking knees,/a parishioner of the Van Gogh stars,/painting lonely villages blue." I love the portion about the knees, it shows such a strong picture of that action, and the stars imagery is very ethereal.

"I am the wincing benefactor of a girl without a name." - Wonderful, the piece was a bit short but I think that you held what you were trying to say within its spaces very well.

Much love,
Juliet.

I love a lot of the images in this, like "Van Gogh stars" and "painting lonely villages blue." I'm not sure how I feel about using "wincing" twice, though, since it is such a strong word and this is such a short poem. At any rate, this is wonderful. Keep writing! :)

it's the language and color and imagery you incorporate into the words that's beautiful. i especially love the van gogh reference. "painting lonely villages blue.", lovely.

Succinct, surrealistic, and just enough. The image of "light collapsing" is brilliant (or perhaps a better word is needed here: such light would not be so bright).