Hey so I know it's on Hiatus or whatever, but it seriously shouldn't be I love it I honestly do and I can't wait to hear more, please update soon I really like this. Charlie is a great character and I like Tyler too you did well writing from a guys P.O.V and I like the brother his great and there relationship was cute at some points there was some information overload but it was still could please update please

That was the last we heard from him but as I see it, it is no big lost(--loss).

sounds good!

hey, i think you've made a good start - you have my attention. there are a few things but i'm sure as you go along you'll improve. keep writing!

Hi,

Firstly, I'd like to disclaim this review with the following: This is not a flame. I am only saying this as constructive criticism, so I am able to help you.

Secondly, the review: I stopped after the second line, which contained a very easy-to-find mistake. Although the plot sounds interesting and somewhat unique (the fact that they are in college), I cannot - for the life of me - continue with a story that makes so many careless mistakes. You should write professionally, and with that comes the necessity to read over your work and fix any mistakes. Also, if you had read over this chapter before you posted, then you should get a beta reader/editor that will help you fix the spelling and grammatical errors (and make sure he/she is a good beta reader - one that knows what he/she is doing, and one that cares!).

Anyway, I hope you take my advice, fix this up a little, and continue writing. If you do happen to take my advice and take out any mistakes, I'd love to continue reading this piece beyond the second line -- contact me if you do.

And another thing -- make sure to correct the mistakes in your summary.

--McQuinn

interesting
can't wait for more

izzie

Wow..what an awesome start to the story..i thinkim going to enjoy this one as will everyone else!

I love it so far! Continue Please when you can! :)