|Reviews for unAmerican|
| penguinfragger 3/12/07 . chapter 1
Pretty good, it had a good spine but you could maybe change the presentation a bit. I'm talking purely esthetic here, but it might change the way the reader begins each strophe (here things are sort of monotous). Also, I thought the chorus came around a little too often. It's good, but too frequent. Other than that your rhymes are good and this was quite enjoyble. Keep it up!