oh no.. this whole thing is so heartbreaking :(

I don't even know what to say. Though I hate sad endings, this story was just so good.I really liked it. It had just enough of that sadness to seem realistic and not too over the top and just all together perfect. You really hit the nail on the head with this one.

Love,
Becca

Others did not understand the sentence Sarah uttered, "Men, can't live with them, can't leave without them." I believe this sentence is foreshadowing, telling the readers, that Sarah will leave with Adam in the end.. This story is so bitter sweet,and sad.. Something tells me, by their conversation, by Adam saying that they were good, was his way of saying that she must have told him of her feelings, and he might have become mad, and they must have fought, but, now they were okay, they would still be friends.. That maybe, in the end, he would "love" her like a friend, and so would she, but, his life resided with Sarah. How awful! But, great ending nonetheless.. We can't always get what we want in life. Great story!

That last bit actually reminded me a lot of the ending of Casablanca, just as a comment. Good job, as well, although the ending was quite sad. I liked it.

Boys are scum. *growls*
Haha but this is good writing, and I feel sorry for Jade. :P The sentence above is because of my friend and this... guy. :P I think Adam's being a bit scummy to Jade, so it fits. (:
Very glad xoxluurve added this to the c2. (:

Wah!! *crys* ... But ... Woah... It was really really good... but really really confusing as well... @.@ I really like though. xD

oh my gah.
that was something. I almost cried..! I loved it though, but it still hirts my heart. I wanted them to be together. By all means, the sad ending did suit the story very well, because it left me wanting a different ending, like more more more! and if it had the exact ending i wanted i would have been able to be like, so yeah, okay, another good one, but this one was like yeah another great one! lol.
the only thing i was wondering about was this line:

-“Men, can’t live with them, can’t leave without them,” Sarah said.

did that have like a hidden meaning can't "leave" without them, because that made sense, but it might just be a typo and you meant "live" either way it wasn't that big of a deal, and that's really the only CC i can give you.
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ashlyn

“Hey,” a small smile formed on my face. -- Should be: "Hey," I said, a small smile forming on my face. OR: "Hey." A small smile formed on my face.

I mean Jade Reynolds on time – Now that’s a miracle in the making.” -- "I mean, Jade Reynolds on time--now that's a miracle in the making."

over the injury, “Ouch.” -- period instead of comma.

momentarily, “I’m glad you came.” -- here, too.

, “I thought my hair could wait until tomorrow.” -- here, too.

“God Jade, you’re so funny…” He muttered with a roll of his eyes. -- "he" shouldn't be capitalized.

, “Come on. Let’s go.” -- period, not comma.

passers by -- one word.

A tiny corner of the world; represented by the numerous faces. -- comma, not semi-colon.

jacket, “Do I know how -- period, not comma.

jacket, “McDonalds, -- here, too.

chair, “Now -- and here.

his dark, curly head -- unclear. "Curly-haired head" would be better.

“Toothpick’ that’s what they used to called me’ -- punctuation!

Charismatic was -- maybe put the word in quotes?

cute,” I grabbed a fry and bit into it -- period, not comma.

Yeah,” he grinned half-heartedly. -- here, too.

surrender, “I know -- here, too.

him, “You’re -- again.

his face, “Time -- again.

head, “That’s -- and again.

right, “Now -- and again.

gratefully, “Thanks.” -- you know the deal.

(Maybe I should stop correcting those mistakes? Yeah, I think you get the picture.)

complimented the -- maybe "complimenting" instead?

It was him that had -- "he who had."

sixth form college -- huh?

“Its nice weather -- it's.

He laughed, “Don’t worry, I forgive you.” At long last he deigned it okay to favour me with a glance.

“We’re good, Jade.” -- These lines should be in the same paragraph. Same thing when Sarah comes up to them, when Sarah speaks, and when Jade speaks. It's confusing when you don't.

position I stood -- position where I stood.

Goodbye Adam. -- comma in between.

And whoa. Totally did NOT expect them to go on the plane together. I was thinking maybe he'd go, and Sarah would stay behind, but that's not what happened. Therefore, I likes. Completely took me by surprise, and the sad ending is great. Of course, it's not really possible for Jade, at this day an age, to be in the terminal without a ticket herself, but I guess you could place this story pre-9/11.

Liked it. You should write more short stories similar to this. Or hey...maybe even a continuation to this one.

-McQuinn

I really enjoyed that. The simplicity of the narration contrasted well with the complexity of the situation. It was a nice touch. :)

I thought Adam and Jade had a very developed relationship for just a one-shot, and the dialogue was great--very realistic. Although I didn't like Adam's character so much (he was fickle to a point where it was...slightly disconcerting), I did understand his conflict, and I was able to empathize with Sarah, Jade, and Adam alike. And that's always a good sign. :DD

"A tiny corner of the world; represented by the numerous faces." I would leave the semi-colon out...I really didn't understand it's function in that sentence.

[“No thank you, Jade,” he whispered into my hair.] I would put a period before "thank you" because it seemed like he was saying "No thanks." xD

Over all, this was very well-written, and I really enjoyed the read. Keep writing!

;)becky
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I thought that for being a straight work, and not my usual choice of reading, this was nonetheless a very interesting and truthful piece. Adam and Jade are like two sides of a mirror, they balance each other, yet at the same time their differences are what prevent them from being more than best friends. Still, I got the feeling that if Adam was ever forced to choose between Sarah and Jade, the longstanding pull between Jade and Adam’s friendship would win over Adam’s romantic feelings for Sarah.

This is one of the very few straight stories that I would like to see continued, and I don’t say that often or lightly. You’ve done a wonderful job with the dynamics between all three characters, but that story just doesn’t seem to ending there, instead you seem to be inviting the reader to make up their own ending.

Thank you for taking the time to read this review.

Lady_DreamWriter
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O man... that is just... killer.

At first i didn't understand so i had to go back up and read little clips and THEN i got what it was all about...aww poor Jade...and Sarah...Sarah has the guy but not the love and Jade has the love but not the guy (am i right? lol) Yep, this was a lovely one-shot...sad but not all endings are supposed to be happy (now if i can only get that into my thick skull...lol!)

--MizSphinx

Aw. The ending was cute^^. Haha. I lurrve sad endings. But.. Why didn't he choose Jade if he loved her? :/

Anyway, I'm really really really sorry for the late review. :)) I'm from reviewers_found.

What a playboy.
I wouldn't really call it "something different" though, seems like a pretty straight forward love-that-is-but-can't story.
Pretty good dialogue though.

I actually don't understand the story. Does Adam like Jade or Sarah? What's really going on? Maybe it would be easier if there were line breaks, so I could see where one scene has stopped. Maybe it's because my attention span is small today but I still don't get it. Maybe I'll read it one more time...

Cherry